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Minding my own business on a peaceful night..caught in'a desert
Lookin for a place to keep a shut eye tight..found a lamp clustered
Didn't know what it was i picked it up an rubbed it gently
Unknown gold lamp out came a prize a beuatiful lady
Sayin im her master an 3 wishes of my choice she'd grant me
What should i choose? A question i was scared to use
Said ask for your desireTo secure my life to my loved ones that show satisfactions let your heart be re-used
I asked for a Talent..anything would do to please a country
On the countriair i felt she was misguided by my proficy
Maybe I should have listened from such a franchize
Between my fingers infront of my eyes were a genie lie
Her name was Hazy B, a restricted character wit caliber
My second wish was a hard pick but i chose wit a pation
She had a weird look in her eye dispized my actions?
Asked her wut the deal, told me she wasnt to blessed
Suffered for a moment hesitant to my last quest
Said if you so lonely i'll wish for somehting fo you
Told me not to do it but i had to pull through
Said wit my words "i wish for you to be what ever you want"
Turns out the wish came true but i never found out the responce
So until this day my genie of power is blooming like a flower
But i have lost her...perfect...then gone quicker then the towers
hazy
( As a genie i had to reply to him before i was to leave...hoping that this poem would send to his heart and be recieved)

I thank you for raising me from my contents---wishes, grants, remorseful repents---
To you I am owed deaths devotion... to you I bring something more powerful than a wizards potion---
‘Rule’ me with every thought and to you I grant any request...belly dance my way to ‘captain hooks’ treasure chest---
tho’ master the same rules do apply, I cannot kill, nor conquer cupids duty, but rub my bottle and out will arise this cutie---
you see in that bottle I remained for 300 and 7 years---through out deceit of my being free I unleashed many unyielding tears---
The world is what I can give you , money upon a tree, food upon a golden plate, a women of Saudi beauty, an imprisoned family set free, a prince of the finest rate, the softest soul turned snooty, anything to you I bow and offer my all---
Tonight is your night of luck if the sky fell dark, the stars gone, the moon hidden, you may wish for these three--- light replenished, stars of constellations, and the moon in your eyes of dignity---

And when you are through, i return to be locked once again, trapped only hope through ink and pen, waiting for the touch to send me a flight, i beg of you please don't use all of your requests this beautiful starless night---

wow this was totally different, not any of the usual topics 'drink, dope,rape, family disputes' that i hear everyday (not being a hypicric, i write masses on those topics) but this hit a spot that i've never really touched on before, because i've never heard anything like it before..i think Rules verse started off really good, the vocab seemed sort of dream-like, but near to the end it broke into a reality, that was a good tecnique, Hazys part was iight, i loved the line.

you see in that bottle I remained for 300 and 7 years---through out deceit of my being free I unleashed many unyielding tears---

that held a lot of emotion, the ending was great as well and the whole collab flowed really well.

i salute you both for trying something different, it worked really well.

and to Hazy: sorry for sleeping on these things the past few days, i been busy na mean? need anything else uppin, just pm me, i'll try to get it checked out...thanks

peace and respect to liquer

This was trippy as fuck..*on drugs ROFL*
But yo...when I saw the title...I thought it was gon be a poem about overcoming alcoholism...ROFL...JESUS! But this was a nice piece babes Nice vocab..I really dunno how to rate these...but nice job ma ((-god I hate these ugly ass smilies they have herre-))

Peace Out and PCP!

Hmm.. nice drop here...

Slightly different styles here...
Meshed well together to bring forth nice imagery and emotion...

I like the fact it wasnt a played topic...

Nice work...

Hazy B..i gotta give you props ma, you came ill...an thanksfor the dope topic...great creativity...keep up the good work...peace

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The Weathers Art
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My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

that was sumthin, in wayz different to tha whole of tha poem community, as well as in each other, but it worked as any collab should, there should be a difference in tha portrayal of tha topic, just not to slide to far off, decent drop...

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not bad....

why not add the chorus: im a genie in a battle babey! LMAO jp


good stuff!

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Maybe I should have listened from such a franchize
Between my fingers infront of my eyes were a genie lie
Her name was Hazy B, a restricted character wit caliber
My second wish was a hard pick but i chose wit a pation
She had a weird look in her eye dispized my actions?
--- Dats what was nice from rule.. Nice Good Wordage .R.S Was good no doubt.

tho’ master the same rules do apply, I cannot kill, nor conquer cupids duty, but rub my bottle and out will arise this cutie---
you see in that bottle I remained for 300 and 7 years---through out deceit of my being free I unleashed many unyielding tears---
The world is what I can give you , money upon a tree, food upon a golden plate, a women of Saudi beauty, an imprisoned family set free, a prince of the finest rate, the softest soul turned snooty, anything to you I bow and offer my all---

This the stand out peace from hazy..
It I liked it my mind just followed that part the easist thats why thats my favorite part from u....

G.P

thanks for teh love