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The mind of a fucking killer is a terible place/
Hes a fucker who murders and luvs the chase/
He loves the feeling and he luvs to kill/
He not only love the smell but also the feel/
He kills fuckers day , night and dawn/
Hes killed people sense the day he was born/







I hate all the shit in the world but i dont wine/
When bitches fuck wit my head i act like Im fine/
I feel like my world is caving in wit noplace to go/
One night I relized I couldnt take it no mo/
My dad aproched me wit this line right here/
I think you been smoking weed and drinking beer/
I went off like I had no sense in my head/
He ask me a bad fuckin question no hes dead/
The day after that I went to the mo fuckin store/
The cashier thought i toke sumthin, that whore/
So she ask me if I did the shit and I said no/
She wouldnt stop fuckin talkin that fuckin ho/
So I ask her to search me the best she can/
But that was all part of my fuckin plan/
She started searching me and I hit her in the face/
Where can you find that bitch now ? no place/



The mind of a fucking killer is a terible place/
Hes a fucker who murders and luvs the chase/
He loves the feeling and he luvs to kill/
He not only love the smell but also the feel/
He kills fuckers day , night and dawn/
Hes killed people sense the day he was born/




He rolled up to tha jail house rollin on dubs/
He wanted to get his gurl thats all it was/
then the cop ask what he was there for/
He looked at the cop knocked him to the floor/
He went out tha door but the cop couldnt stop/
Killer relized he could make it less this fool was dropped/
So he pulled his gun out and shot the pig/
He looked at him bleed and smoked a cig/
He thought to himself "Whats happened to me"/
"I kill one dude now I kill every one i see"/
then he looked at the pig and thought again/
"Ill kill every fucker on earth thats not my friend"/
He then went to his home and seen his wife/
He saw her fuckin another dude , and got a knife/
He said to the dude ,"ont make me mad"/
"Im a fuckin husband and a fuckin dad"/
Im a worker , a guy, a student , and thiller
But the funnest job i got is being a killer?





The mind of a fucking killer is a terible place/
Hes a fucker who murders and luvs the chase/
He loves the feeling and he luvs to kill/
He not only love the smell but also the feel/
He kills fuckers day , night and dawn/
Hes killed people sense the day he was born/







Give me some feedback homies.

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I can be nice but dont make me mad....cause when I loose control.......your dead !!

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Good shit. Very long thats a whole fuckin song. Anyway its good words and everything but your format needs a little work other than that it was some good shit.

Holla At Em

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Yo....

The good - It seems like ur best verse was ur last verse. It rhymed well and started showing signs of multi usage. All verses flowed nice

The Bad - The other verses seemed to lack metas or multies... Add these or some wordplay to the piece .......

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Mystic (Traitor)

that shit was hot dawg

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pretty cool shit, some really good punches. i liked the third verse the best, it was like the big conclusion. nice drop.

i was feeling that shit it was mad nice the shit you said was banging hola at my shit down 2 ride

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JR.delinquents

that shit was hot.... and im not even a killer but now i wanna be.
you need to drop that shit to a fire ass beat.

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That was aight man, but u could work on yo vocab a little bit, it would be better that way and little more complex

it flowed good and structure is good.....keep flowin

It was tight. I was feelin it.
Holla
Necee

yo I need some mo feedback

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"The Legion" takes no prisoners!

I can be nice but dont make me mad....cause when I loose control.......your dead !!

my site:http://freestyleman.proboards25.com/index.cgi