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Old 10-10-04, 11:44 PM   #1
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Yvonne vs. I_Daughter_Hoz

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Rules:
10-12 Lines Text
20-30 Lines Topical
*must specify battle type at check in
*pm your opponent to decide

Time Limits:
verse due by the 13th
good luck.

do not edit posts, no excuse.
if you edit you will be dq'd
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Old 10-11-04, 10:14 AM   #2
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No need to Pm opponent bout the battle. .. i dont do topical or poetry bull so its just str8 text battlin..

Checkin in ..good luck

and i think that editing The verse thing should be to a certain extent..like what if we edit to correct a misspelled word or to fix up the structure a little more?

well if we made it to a certain extent, some would critique their verses, abuse the privelage. ya know? - the verb

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Old 10-12-04, 07:09 PM   #3
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I_Daughter_Hoz:

you get a free ticket this round. Yvonne, ya opponent has left the tourney.
congrats.
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Old 10-13-04, 03:58 AM   #4
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lol hmmm....yo verbal i know what i told you but fuck it ia just do this 1 then u can cut me out...


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Old 10-13-04, 09:28 AM   #5
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NO FEEDING (should be added)


like u can see beneath my name....now here i go..

she thinks to daughter hoz cos dats her inheritance
10 lines& she gon fold..mario is too short to climb d fence
u gettin whooped as time gose by..how could u put ur hands in fire
got peeps laffin as ur lines..cos u just a joke and u Flawless Lier
no need to make punches reign in my post,i still consume her ass as i flow
spread her& put the third leg in the hole..thats when u'll see her blow
she trys to beat out the minimum intelligence she got in her skull
bitch your tank is empty..so stop suckin..his cock could fall
dis gurl still TIPSY repeatin ha A B C...4k me 2ice if she win
it would take my absence to clean ha from d seen,cos he trash popin from d bin


lol....did i really have to try?
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Old 10-13-04, 02:57 PM   #6
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lmfao@you thinking you didnt need to try. or was that just an excuse for being whack?? and how could i feed off ya verse i dont even understand half the shit u was tryin to call personals :/ ..


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......Just a Few to get Started......
im prone to trash vets,yet Being Whack is this Ho's Hobby-
Sure you ripped Mad Heads,But They were a bunch of Nobodies-
Spent a Day peepin ya Raps, ya flow n shit is awful yo-
Shoulda stayed where you were at, doin poetry n topicals-
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It's a rapid murder,peep flows u know my drops Drill ya-
my raps'll hurt her,weak ho aint learn shit from Raw Killa-
But hey he's garbage too, i dont expect you to be tight-
I'll Have ya Carnige loose,eatin thru tubes for the rest of ya life-
i think its nice,Inspired by Dope Fiens, but you'll never last n this game-
my punches give you a nose bleed,to swell up that masculine face-
its a disgrace i dont need witty lines to beat this Chipmunk-
This bitch got 3 teeth, so dont question why she smile wit her lips tucked-

Ahem..vote up with explained votes.
 
Old 10-13-04, 04:29 PM   #7
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Feedback:

both verses were decent first rounders, since no one rele spits there best the first round. these fell in line perfectly with the rest of the round one tourney drops. nto too bad, now for the voting.

Yvonne:

you dropped first, and dropping first in a battle thats not blind rele gets extra points. (5) ya had some nice personals, but ya punches werent fully hitting the top strengths they could have, again its the first round, and not many people try their best anyways.(3) ya structure was pretty good in the first 4 lines and the last 4 lines, but the middle 2 threw off the story line.(4) ya had a nice opener, but i wasnt feeling the closing punch. (3) ya wordplay wasnt fully connecting either, but ya had a littel vocab. (3) and last your comdedy lines didnt make me luagh, but they made sense, and thats key (4). (ya only needed a couple funny lines and ya got this vote)

22 points - verb's rating

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I_Daughter_Hoz:

your opener was also hot, had a kinda thesis to it. (4) the first four lines were close to dope, a little more wordplay and a meta here and there, and they would have reached that title.(6) but ya last 8 Lines was a turn around, dont get me wrong, they werent shitty, they just werent consistantly landing hot punches like the first 4 was. (3) it seems like ya had some good ideas and then lost em. ya structure was a strong point in this verse, ya had every thing connecting...one after another. (5) ya had some wordplay, and ya attemtped some multis. they werent dope but they upped your battle points. (4) ya closure has half good and half bad, the first line of the closing bar was not a good setting or exposing rhyme, but the final line took it home, ya ended nicely. (6) ( with a more consistant rhyme scheme you would take this vote)

28 points - verb's rating

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Decypher:

Yvonne's dope line-
Quote:
Originally Posted by Yvonne
u gettin whooped as time gose by..how could u put ur hands in fire
got peeps laffin as ur lines..cos u just a joke and u Flawless Lier



Yvonnes's trash line-
Quote:
Originally Posted by Yvonne
she trys to beat out the minimum intelligence she got in her skull
bitch your tank is empty..so stop suckin..his cock could fall


Feedback: ppl dont usually take the time to check links, those went out about 2 months ago.

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IDH's dope line-
Quote:
Originally Posted by I_Daughter_Hoz
im prone to trash vets,yet Being Whack is this Ho's Hobby-
Sure you ripped Mad Heads,But They were a bunch of Nobodies-


IDH's trash line-
Quote:
Originally Posted by I_Daughter_Hoz
i think its nice,Inspired by Dope Fiens, but you'll never last n this game-
my punches give you a nose bleed,to swell up that masculine face-


Feedback: ppl dont appease to cute little marks in verses anymore, those went out about 4 months ago.

Overall Vote:

yvonne had consistancy, but there wasnt much to be consistant with, IDH set the bar high with the first lines of her verse, but didnt remain consistant throughout the entire verse, but the closure was a key part to this text battle, and IDH happened to grasp this fact. both gave solid effort, but I_Daughter_Hoz deserves this vote.

(in verbs opinion)

Vote: I_Daughter_Hoz

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Old 10-13-04, 04:41 PM   #8
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I vote for I daughter hoz as well,
due to stronger punches, better structure and good personals,your opener set this up nicely, and you were on point str8 thru to the end, the closer was decent, i don't like links in battles,because i usually dont feel like checking them, but in this case, i did and it was a funny line.....no hate to yvonne, because i respect all the fems, but yvonne, i have seen better from you, but i have to go with i daughter hoz on this one,,good job both, nice to see fems doin well............1


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Old 10-13-04, 07:13 PM   #9
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she thinks to daughter hoz cos dats her inheritance
10 lines& she gon fold..mario is too short to climb d fence
^^^^ok...not so clever not a hard dis...soft personal...

u gettin whooped as time gose by..how could u put ur hands in fire
got peeps laffin as ur lines..cos u just a joke and u Flawless Lier
^^nahhh not a hard dis
no need to make punches reign in my post,i still consume her ass as i flow
spread her& put the third leg in the hole..thats when u'll see her blow
^^^alright..

she trys to beat out the minimum intelligence she got in her skull
bitch your tank is empty..so stop suckin..his cock could fall
^^suck dick disses, kinda played

dis gurl still TIPSY repeatin ha A B C...4k me 2ice if she win
it would take my absence to clean ha from d seen,cos he trash popin from d bin
^^^huh?

This verse wasnt so hard hitting, but it'll do I suppose.



Quote:
Originally Posted by I_Daughter_Hoz
......Just a Few to get Started......
im prone to trash vets,yet Being Whack is this Ho's Hobby-
Sure you ripped Mad Heads,But They were a bunch of Nobodies-
^^nice personal,

Spent a Day peepin ya Raps, ya flow n shit is awful yo-
Shoulda stayed where you were at, doin poetry n topicals-
^^^lol cool dis here
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It's a rapid murder,peep flows u know my drops Drill ya-
my raps'll hurt her,weak ho aint learn shit from Raw Killa-
^^ok
But hey he's garbage too, i dont expect you to be tight-
I'll Have ya Carnige loose,eatin thru tubes for the rest of ya life-
^^ok
i think its nice,Inspired by Dope Fiens, but you'll never last n this game-
my punches give you a nose bleed,to swell up that masculine face-
ehh^^
its a disgrace i dont need witty lines to beat this Chipmunk-
This bitch got 3 teeth, so dont question why she smile wit her lips tucked-

^^ I went to the link, but it took me to a battle. Was there suppose to be a pic? Oh well..

I think IDH was more potent lyrically here with personals. Yvonne did dis her opponent but it wasnt hardhitting. For example, saying she sucks cock, or the personal about IDH's atvar (being to small to climb the fence). Thats not just enough with a potent lyricist sometimes.
IDH was more direct in the earlier bars...when she said she beat nobodies, and she should have stuck to doing Poetry and how she lost to Rawkilla and even he's wack. Towards the end tho, it slowed up. But for the hard way she opened up
my vote is IDH.






so who was this vote in favor for?
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Old 10-13-04, 10:19 PM   #10
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lol@my link not being the pic oops :-/ . dont matter ne way tho thanx for votes...next round should be harder depending on my opponent..
 
Old 10-14-04, 01:48 AM   #11
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lol...come on Verb...
u seriously didnt see who i voted 4?
look directly above ur question ma.
 
Old 10-14-04, 05:55 AM   #12
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lol i daughter_hoz......i'ld say props to ur ho ghost gurl...

LOL.

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Old 10-15-04, 12:10 AM   #13
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I_Daughter_Hoz wins, due to KO.

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