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Old 09-04-05, 01:37 PM   #1
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Hurricaine Katrina

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Hurricaine Katrina

Too amazed for words like caged birds people trapped
Church steeple wrapped in the arms of the ocean overlapped
By mother nature, brother it nomenclature six hundred
Miles long, this sad scene is like a bad dream brain thundered
And can’t sleep it paint freak scriptures and deep pictures
of destruction on my mind so strong and divine like ugly fixtures
its all real like a small meal stuff to be eaten and feeding
Imaginations with crime after the water leave you bleeding
And needing bandages for the damages done crime ignite
Too amazed for words like caged birds people trapped
Church steeple wrapped in the arms of the ocean overlapped
By mother nature, brother it nomenclature six hundred
Miles long, this sad scene is like a bad dream brain thundered
And can’t sleep it paint freak scriptures and deep pictures
of destruction on my mind so strong and divine like ugly fixtures
its all real like a small meal stuff to be eaten and feeding
Imaginations the city officials of New Orleans join in proceedings
Worry came about hurricane Katrina she ripped homes
And flipped unknown buildings, killing folks with strong
Wind and rain thunder loud as funnel clouds twirled
Like spinning tops to a never ending stop the world
Was amazed at the damage it destroyed lyrical cultures
And physical structures it closed roads blew down sculptures
The mess was too extreme for the rescue team it seem hazy
As disaster gravy dripped president sought after navy ships like crazy
He sent crews and large teams to New Orleans to aid in rescue missions
People trapped on roof tops the truth drops to helicopter pilots collisions
With water s of fright just to alter the height of survival no violet mission
The sewage vapors grips like paper clips to nose as the flood waters rose
It was a wet bazaar even BRET FAVRE of the Green Bay Packers close
Hope on finding many alive
 
Old 09-04-05, 07:44 PM   #2
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thought i saw this as an OM............ structure is if-y, but it flows........ original topic for this site, i guess............ not really emotional in the traditional sense, but i could see where this piece was coming from...... again overuse of metas and synonyms that don't relate to the topic can disract the reader (Brett Favre)......... overall 7/10
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Old 09-09-05, 12:57 PM   #3
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You flow bold but your style grow old like cut wood
Butt not hood your juice wrecked and don’t produce
Effects got a loose check wanna cash it? Even Bruce
Lee would kung Fu your dumb crew, rhymes not spruce
You don’t peep mine so you have a freak mind not a deuce
I’m from the slums so insecure when you will become mature
You can't walk on streets
 
 


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