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09-10-03, 10:02 PM | #1 | |||||||
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"You Don't Know"
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You may think that life's a game, but I'm not a piece to play wit
You would think I'd cuss you out in front of class but I'm not the one to say shit You may think I never loved you, but you don't know I've loved you more than any other And I would've called you everyday, but I was aware that you were playing me so I didn't even bother You don't know that I've hardly payed attention to other girls since you gave me your number You don't know that when I dream of you I wish I were in an eternal slumber You don't know that the reason I seem depressed is because of you and lack of sleep You don't know that this lack of sleep is due to me thinking of you You don't know that everything I've said to you is true You don't know that now my view of you is stained And you don't know because of you my soul is strained. You don't know that I wrote a dozen poems for you And you don't know I've burned them all in an attempt to forget you You don't know that I try to avoid you so I won't think as much about you You don't that this is probably the last of poems dedicated to you And you don't know that I can forgive you but I can't forget you. It's certainly not my best poem, but everything I said is true. The thing is, I kind of want to give it to the girl I wrote it for, but then again, I don't want to seem like a fool. I try not to talk to her anymore and I never told her how I really feel and what I know,and I'm not expecting for her to be flattered by it, but I still don't want to feel stupid. I'd appreciate it if you told me if you think I should give it to her or not it's a shame I never got to hit that...she has the biggest finest "assets" I've ever seen. |
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09-11-03, 09:26 AM | #2 | ||||||
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dude life is to short to not do anything. No regrets. I would do it and then see what the outcome is. The poem is true. hit me up sometime
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09-11-03, 10:31 AM | #3 | |||||||
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niccccccccceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee........... ...all very true..........keep elevatin nice idea............................
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09-11-03, 05:43 PM | #4 | |||||||
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iight
nice poem it was a good read, although the repeative thing isnt my thing. i agree with Smooth JT, life is to short, and if you dont end up giving it to her your probly going to regret it sooner or later. even if you decide not to give it to her, you should tell her how you feel. my love ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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09-11-03, 07:02 PM | #5 | ||||||
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being true to your self is the first step to freedom. like my manz said, no regrets.
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09-12-03, 12:09 AM | #6 | |||||||
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^Enuff said |
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09-15-03, 07:08 PM | #7 | ||||||
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Certainly full of personal truth and feelings. It may not be the most resoundingly universal piece or anything. But it has that personal touch which makes it good.
I thought you didnt use the repetitive thing too well. I dunno whether you should give it to her or not. Cos the situation is yours. Each one is individual. Just got to dig deep and find the answer yourself or something i guess.. ...resp.. |
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09-15-03, 09:29 PM | #8 | |||||||
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agree with previous structure critiques.
but I got into it... I say this cautiously but it was a gripping verse. i would......in a certain situation.... however i have no concept or idea of your relationship and therefore cannot pass judgement. I will only say that you should make a decision while in an objective state... without forgetting why subjectivity plays a role. Peace
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09-15-03, 11:22 PM | #9 | ||||||
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I really enjoyed reading that., i thought it was beautiful i think you should give it to the grl u wrote it for
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09-16-03, 09:09 PM | #10 | |||||||
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thx for the replies...im still not sure what i should do tho...i think i'll just talk to her.
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