This battle was already closed, but I just wanted to know what ya'll thinkin' on it.

Yo, why the fuck did you even try to test me.//
Kid Killa's gonna kick your bitch ass cross country.//
Everybody come see this, King Crunch has been dethroned.//
Yo, when you wrote this BS rhyme you sure you wasn't stoned?//
Damn, your verse is the wackest shit I've read on RB yet.//
Stupid, even a retard coulda told ya you would lose this bet.//
Cause now bitch, you fuckin' playin' against the Kid Killa.//
I jump so high over your ass you'd think I'm Reggie Miller.//
Look, it's a bird, a plane, no your Mama suckin' my dick.//
I could kick ya ass in rhymin' even while I'm enjoyin' dis trick.//

Played...
Flow wasn't that great
Punches need work
Try to even out the line length
And up the vocab and multies..

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^ multis and vocab in a battle mean shit...if ya gonna give info give correct info. His lines were a fine length, they dont need to be perfect to have good flow.

first of all drop the // from the end of your lines.. we dont need it. work on ya rhyme scheme, your rhymes are basic and they arent good, like miller and killer. to basic. work on ya punches also and try to include personals in them, make sure you have a good set up and come complex. Read some battles in LLL and you can see what good punches are. learn what is played and what isnt, and see feebles thread also to learn about good personals.

if you have any more problems/questions..feel free to ask

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Okay... How about this verse?

E-yo, they call me Killa Kid but I'm really a massacre//
My flows are so strong they make bad MC's wacker//
My posts may be low, but my skills is on overdrive//
Synkronized, I'll embarrass you so bad, you'll wish you aint alive//
And I strive to rid RB of these fuckin' wack MC's//
You ugly mofo, I thought you was the clown from Mickey D's!//
Can you feel the rage blastin' out of your fuckin' PC?//
That's how strong I'm attackin' your ass, you can't touch me//
The Kid Killa will be back online to see how these votes go//
But I won't be surprised when the votes are Killa - 5 you - 0.//

-yo, they call me Killa Kid but I'm really a massacre//
My flows are so strong they make bad MC's wacker//
Try and focus on dissin ya opponent, not glorifyin yourselfy
My posts may be low, but my skills is on overdrive//
Synkronized, I'll embarrass you so bad, you'll wish you aint alive//
same thinh here you've yet to throw a real punch
And I strive to rid RB of these fuckin' wack MC's//
You ugly mofo, I thought you was the clown from Mickey D's!//
maybe ya first attempt at a punch, but not even a good one
Can you feel the rage blastin' out of your fuckin' PC?//
That's how strong I'm attackin' your ass, you can't touch me//
The Kid Killa will be back online to see how these votes go//
But I won't be surprised when the votes are Killa - 5 you - 0.//
yeah man, diss your opponent instead of sayin how good you are nah mean? and get rid of the// things

Ok, this is my last verse. I'm gonna keep postin' at this thread for feedback on my verses.

Yo, butcher, you shoulda tried to get someone else to battle.//
How the fuck you know how to rhyme, you was raised by cattle!//
How many people got a piece of that heifer you call mama?//
From George Bush to Bin Laden to the fuckin' Dalai Lama?//
Now watch as I pull a butcher and cut open this cow.//
My lyrical magic leaves muthafuckas like you cryin' "HOW?"//
And now, here comes Kid Killa, prepared to kick anyone's ass.//
Don't step to me again, I'm kinda tired of takin' out the trash.//
His name's butcher but the only thing he can cut is paper.//
Tell your mom's to come to Bk if she wants some Nilla Wafers.//