yo yo iv got no flow,i jus say i know,tell me sumting i dnt know,even better give me that doe!
aint happening-so wot is?im not takeing the piss,iv never bin the 1 2 diss.
be real! im ready to kill at will.
so chill im not looking for a deal,far too many shop till's to steal!
hear me? u cant c me? 2pac said bury me a g,then we'll c!
thanks for feed,i carry it like a neckless beed,im gods seed,but im yet to be free'd.
im high,never cared if i died,too many drugs results in brain fried,aniexty but still i dont hide.
so bring it on,im chatting this aint no song,i wonder where i belong!
to much lip,dont get fuck all jip,the only word before hop is hip.
thats a hit,im legit,i blow like a overdose fit.
so plz i need to be tought,i'm prepared to learn between dates of court-yeah thats rite im apart of that sort.
ye ye ye

ok u need to fix that structure of yours... and get some better lines and shit!! that basic crap fool.. we've been over this dude! ppl have told u! up ur vocab. fix ur structure its not that fuckin hard dude!! im sick of reading the same crap!!

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ok cool,can you give me sum examples again plz?on how to stucture proper and shit.i'l work on vocab i.e i'l take abit more then 2 mins.i jus writ it all in 2 mins and dnt think bout it ai8t

lining ur bars so its an easier read... check some of my raps. they have a decent structure flow

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Closed. Retarded Topicals. Read the Rules.

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