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09-26-03, 07:10 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Slow Dance
IP: 7AA4 D75E
Poem removed by original author's request
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09-26-03, 07:36 PM | #2 | ||||||
..A New Breed of Femcee..
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IP: 4427 437B
OMG. Hazy baby, this piece was absolutely ADORABLE. One of the best things I've read on here in a long time, seriously! So simple, yet so full of meaning and wisdom. I loved it entirely. Every single line, great imagery, nice title and extraordinary message.
My favorite parts were: >When you ask How are you? Do you hear the reply? >Ever told your child, We'll do it tomorrow? And in your haste, Not see his sorrow? Beautiful, Mama. Great to have you back on the boards.....hope you stick around for a while... Luv, GeGe* |
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09-26-03, 10:23 PM | #3 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4779 5259
i've seen this before, someone sent me this in an email so forgive me for doubting your claim to being the author but nonetheless a good piece but i cannot properly respond because i've read it before, 1luv.
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09-26-03, 11:06 PM | #4 | |||||||
Special Ghost To Blow
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IP: 4577 CD9A
wonderful spoken word type of peice..ima sucker for anythign
like this i always gets me listening...that coffeehouse beat and a smooth voice that im imagining from yourself to lace the beat something that people could fall asleep to or wake up with... im saying this in a good way dont get me wrong hazy... wonderful imagery and dialogue..nothing to critique wouldnt wanna critique..this was awesome... scrolling aside la paz |
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09-26-03, 11:32 PM | #5 | |||||||
..A New Breed of Femcee..
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IP: 4577 CD9A
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09-27-03, 09:47 AM | #6 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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IP: E15A F646
i liked this...had good imaginary an descriptions, and emotion was pure..you could reall inhance every word an realize wut you was sayin...good vibe
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09-27-03, 11:07 AM | #7 | |||||||
Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
iight
i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten it in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either
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09-27-03, 11:08 AM | #8 | |||||||
Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
iight
i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten this poem in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either. ~Tera~ DONT HATE
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R.I.P to my lost girl
~ Nyla ~ keep singing in heaven |
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09-27-03, 12:36 PM | #9 | |||||||
Banned 4 biting
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IP: CEF5 716F
I really liked this piece,i diden't get the meaning the first time reading it.Then i read it over again and it made a lot more sense to me.Overall it was a pretty nice poem to a hard topic,it was very basic.
Stay up...keep dropping 1 |
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09-27-03, 01:36 PM | #10 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 640C 3FBD
That's weird, I got this one in an email too.
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09-27-03, 06:58 PM | #11 | ||||
Flyweight
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IP: 333F 7BE3
Ok honestly I wasn't really feeling this.
Try to make your next piece a little more complex Try Some Imagry, similes are sweet and easy, and so are metaphors. Mabey its just my taste in poetry or how I write. No beef just being real
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09-27-03, 07:20 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 74E6 E752
i love this piece
i like the topic alot and with the basic style u aplied u pulled it off big time Ever told your child, We'll do it tomorrow? And in your haste, Not see his sorrow? Let a good friendship die Cause you never had time To call and say,"hi" When you worry and hurry through your day, It is like an unopened gift.... Thrown away. i really liked those lines and yes i can remember u from way back keep posting |
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09-28-03, 12:22 AM | #13 | ||||||||
Atra Ludio or Hip-Hop?
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IP: C7FB 7170
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No comment. I've parodized plenty of lines from other people. So I shouldn't front. But parodization and plagerization aint the same thing. Again, no comment. *Shrugs* |
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09-28-03, 01:23 AM | #14 | ||||||
..A New Breed of Femcee..
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IP: 399E F0FD
I've never known Hazy to pass off someone else's work for her own....I hope she didnt this time..
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09-28-03, 07:37 PM | #15 | ||||||
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IP: F79F E8EA
Twas like a gentle yet lightly substantial breeze. Lightly in the sense it isn't immediately heavy...
It was easy to get into. Easy to read all the way through. Very nice piece. Executed quite superbly. Though the ending came good in the end, i felt it was a bit off (a bit, that's my critique!..heh..).. ....resp... |
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