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Old 01-03-04, 04:19 PM   #1
Angel Eyez
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I strech your skin until it pulls apart like a 'Now And Later'
I'll chop off all your limbs and feed you to an Alligator
Impale you with a knife through the throat like 'Gladiator'
Sever your head and try to glue it back on straighter
None greater, Angel Eyez is no doubt the sickest
The only one known to leave your body in a thicket
While I take your castrated balls to your girl and yell "LICK IT!"
And then spray ten thousand bullets at wack faggots like Midwikid
Kill kids, kill brothers, kill sisters, fathers, and mothers
Sneak up on you in bed and your ass will get smothered
Wait a few days for your body to bloat up like Sally Struthers
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Old 01-03-04, 04:22 PM   #2
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love the title..er..yeah

anyway i felt like this ended too short, like i was waiting for some amazing finisher and it never came..you could develop some of your ideas, throw in a few multis and metas and it would be improved..

'fully equipped with a handful of peanuts to hurl at your granny, while shes suckin your grandfathers penis'
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Old 01-03-04, 04:22 PM   #3
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thought it was very basic...need to up the scheme...use a better topic instead of jus anything....also the structure and length need work...pZ

need to leave links....
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Old 01-03-04, 04:29 PM   #4
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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Old 01-03-04, 04:31 PM   #5
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Yo, basic as hell, but kinda had an Eminem ring to it...alrigh' spi', ya jus' need ta work on multis, vocab, length, an a lil bit o' flow...
Alrigh' overall.........
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