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05-15-06, 02:36 PM
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g's the devil
IP: CDEB CB21
definition of a true g is nuthin but street wisdom
stay clear of imprisonment and it will all make sense the worlds a notebook n the mind becomes a pen no more being hopeful cos the street aint one to forgive mercy has no friends so keep livin until the end willin to do whatever it takes to make it big duckin cops n feds all afta ur head seem to be chasin only ur races muthafuckin racists hope they all dead keepin it real packin steel dont believe in fear it was singed with the blast of the gat residue of bloody fiends who said they were ur friends nuthin but enemies never a friend of me ya cease with each toke of the weed but please this wasnt how it was supposed to be i guess the sreets was too much for a g to clutch losin the grip on it trigger finger brusin from all the shootins who flipd the script man fuk this shit i cant pull no more cos the devils tuggin it http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2743221 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2743230 Last edited by rysme : 05-15-06 at 02:41 PM. |
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05-15-06, 02:41 PM
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Black Poet
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IP: F17F 09D9
Can't leave decent feed but I have got to go !!
uping complexity and vocab,.. nothing really got my attention.. it was an alright drop need to elevate your writing fams !! keep em coming !! 1~ |
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05-19-06, 08:34 PM
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oh yea?
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IP: 6377 1993
not bad dude
had some simple lines but you still did your thing here had some cool lines, not bad at all " willin to do whatever it takes to make it big duckin cops n feds all afta ur head seem to be chasin only ur races muthafuckin racists hope they all dead keepin it real packin steel dont believe in fear it was singed with the blast of the gat residue of bloody fiends who said they were ur friends nuthin but enemies never a friend of me ya cease with each toke of the weed but please this wasnt how it was supposed to be i guess the sreets was too much for a g to clutch" ^fav lines
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05-20-06, 12:40 AM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 6B8A 15BA
I'm a GD and no I'm not the devil lol
but this was an okay piece just elevate a little |
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05-20-06, 04:40 AM
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IP: DEE5 0906
Rhyme Shceme Was Simple, But It Was Deep & Metaphorical...you Can Tell When Somebodys Writen A Bunch Of Bullshit, & When They Writen From Experience & From The Heart...you Was Speakin The Truth.
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05-22-06, 03:14 PM
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IP: F154 0779
nie verse
simple rhyme scheme but u was tryna get a message across u spat the truth just improve the rhymin scheme a lil bit... |
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