Could I have some feedback from my recent battle I want to know what Im doing wrong here

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=59860

thanks

your not wack, but the crew lines were inapproriate wordplay since ya opponet aint in 2 of em

also undertstaemnt was better all peeps saying u came good dawg

yeah but if i get KO'd this would be the forth time in a row ive been KO'd

dude i was Ko'd like 3 times in a row, and it has helped me elevate, your verse was tight, but it's up to other peoples opinions, i probably would have voted for you...

u aint wack bro jus' check my shit u look like eminem compared to me i need tha fuckin help.

Psyco

Not Wack...But Room 4 Improvement...Flow Was Aight But Punches Werent Really There And What Was There Werent Hittin Hard Enuff...Direct Them More 2wards Understatement...They Were Just Lines Written Down And I Think I Saw One Personal...
Wordplay Aswell...Seemed A Bit Forced 2 Try 2 Impress...Just Let It Flow In The Punches...You'll Get Much Better Results...

Other Than That...Ur Verse Was Aight...Keep Workin...

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get out of frontlines, thats your flaw to many dick riders in frontlines.

Yeah but all tha people in elite are better than me so i wont be able to win in elite anyway

The only prob I got with your lyricks is that they got too much in one bar.

Thats the thing with these internet rhymers, WHERE"S THE RHYTHM?
try to say that shit to a beat, it doesn't fit.

You let these dick rydin elementry motha fuckaz tell you to elevate, right they will elevate you right to the basement.

I couldn't believe a real life mc can go down to a wannabe, cause he put nasty gay remarks, in his verse.

I don't care what they say, their are alliances who vote together, which really defeats the "keep it real" attitude.

So don't even take this site seriously, it get's to the point where your like why even try.


Just have fun kid