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28. Rash of Insanity


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Minimum posts to vote: 300

Check in by: 03-10-05 at 10:16 PM

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MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-10-05 07:46 AM.

~Babylon~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-10-05 08:27 PM.

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doppping in a min...........................................

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Alright this is just feedback due to me being in CS even though im barly active but gotta keep up on the topica/poetry battles to see the comp. along with the fam....

Bab- your piece was very strong... the vocab wasnt really spectacular but it doesnt really need to be in every piece... your structure was very well put together and your imagery was good aswell... your emotion was strong and the imagery you had painted a vivid picture in my mind... nice drop man


Mista- your piece was good aswell... the first thing i noticed is that you went freeverse style on your topical... alota cats dont like that but me being a poet and usually having freeverse that is what i usually do in topicals aswell... but yeah your piece was pretty solid aswell... your emotion lacked a little bit but your imagery was good aswell/... structure was solid and everything else just work on the emotion and most close battles like this if you go freeverse cats look down on that for some reason cause they stupid and dont really get why we do it...

but yeah both of you dropped good... bab i got you next kid..

whoa thats pretty good mista you gettin better your iagery had improved alot, the syllable count is still bad tho, stucture is getting there, flow isnt quiote there eyt but its pretty good

checkin polls uppin for yall

this is going to be a close battle i figure, both came out with nice verses

id vote, but i can't so i'll leave some feed....this was an interesting topic, and both of you took different approaches....babylon, not bad man, i thought your verse had more emotion, but lacked vocab and wordplay, and some flow was kinda off in some places, but you made up for it in emotion and imagery, that was pretty kickin............mista, nice drop, although its hard gettin use to your rhyme scheme, you get a really good picture built up in your head when reading, didnt think you had as much emotion in your as babylon's, but you definately had nice vocab/wordplay, and especially towards the end, you could really feel passion in your writing......yeah, so, good drop by both....gl to you both

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Voted For: ~Babylon~

Mista:
Your verse was really confusing at frirst..but after reading it for a while i saw it was just a different style.. your verse was good but you really didn'dt have enough imagery in my point of view.. It was hard to understand it at first.. but i also couldn't feel emotion in ur verse.. your strucutre was alright..but structure doesn't really matter..but im a topical you should always have good flow to make it easier to understand..

Babylon: Your verse was very basic man.. i've sseen alot better from you before. Hopefully in VE you come alot harder.. but yeah.. i could feel you emotion in this verse and I could picture the images in my head alotot better..but ur vocab wassn't as good as i'd expect so work on that also..

vopte: Babylon

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mista i think it woulda helped more if you rhymed a lil more....but ur imagery was good and the detail u gave waz good.....your vocab was nice..your verse stayed together like on topic....i woulda approached da topic another way but the way u did it was more interestin....keep it up

Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

damn.......................................mista you definatly had a hot drop....
break it down.

baba-aight you had a decent verse but came nowhere near mista........your structure was here and there........you had decent flow........and i felt you played the topic well.......but you lacked in imagry........there was some but your lines werent typed out right to add much imagry.......you lacked emotion in your verse.......you kina just seemed like you threw it together without thinking about what you were writing.....you did however have some decent vocab in there.......like i said it was decent.....but not close to mista

mista-aiight your verse was pretty ill man........ima have to battle you topical sometime when i get some of my battles closed.....but yeah.....your verse had really good imagry...........i really liked how your story went...its something we all heard of but not like something everyone would think could be realted to this topic.....so in that sense i felt it was creative as well.....your rhyme scheme was good.......although im sure not everyone likes it......im used to it cuz i write poerty and shit..........you had good structure.........you vocab was good...and you had okay flow......but since you had AB AB rhyme scheme it wasnt that good.......

good job both of you......baba you had a nice verse but not elevated enough to abttle mista....

v/Mista
rtf....links in sig

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Yeah mane ^^ I'm glad you noticed................


Uppin.

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Voted For: ~Babylon~

Baba-Fruit took this one in my opinion. His drop had more intelligence in it to me, and it was more interesting. I was feelin it. Tha whole structure and flow of it was on point. Didnt really understand that meaning of tha topic til i read ur verse. U explained it, and stayed on topic thruout tha whole flow, thats why i gave u my vote
mista you had a ok verse, but i thought this battle was one sided. ur verse didnt flow good to me, and i found it rather simple. i think u came harder wit wordplay and vocab in this one, but i still think baba-fag got it. plus i didnt like ur whole linebreakdown thing.
overall-this battle was a easy vote to me. bab came out far more prepared in this one.


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