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05-23-04, 09:12 PM | #1 | ||||
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Behind The Clouds
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Grey Mist Of Thick Air
Cluttered Over My Face Showing That No One Will Care If I Ever Leave This place For I Can't See Love Or Passion A Road To Lead Into Arms To Hold Me Showing Me Satisfaction Of Lifes Gifts & Remote Charms The Clouds Sometimes Damp Getting Pieces Into My Throat Try To Breath, I Hesitate, For I Can't I'd Pray To God But To Speak I Choke Wondering If Ever I Should Dream Romance About Life & It's Wealth Cloud Is Thick You Can't Hear Me Scream Help, Me Find Away To Save Myself Just A Nobody In Your Croud Lost, Forgotton &, Unheard Behind The Grey Cloud Unworthy Of Giving Birth To My Word.. |
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05-25-04, 10:15 PM | #2 | ||||
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this is a short ass poem and 3 views...the fuck
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05-25-04, 10:18 PM | #3 | |||
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Hmm need to make it Longer.
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05-26-04, 08:09 AM | #4 | |||||||
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Could Use Some Better Vocab Too.
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05-27-04, 07:56 AM | #5 | ||||
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^^Two shittiest replies ever
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05-27-04, 02:07 PM | #6 | ||||||
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i t was not that bad of a poem, if they have nothing good to say dun fuckin listen to em. ne way, u could of made it longer though. I thought it was a good topic to write about. I never really saw a relation of the title to the words of the poem. What i seen was your emtions mixed with clouds, an i don't think thats the point you were trying to get across. Other than that this was good, stayy thaa fuckk upp...
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05-29-04, 08:54 PM | #7 | ||||
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thanks for the good reply...stay up
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