*8 Mile beat*

(Spoken)
Damn.......niggas cheated me out badly man........shit
Yo Check it out

(Rapped)
I've been critizied horrific for everything I've done wrong//
I'm gettin tired of it plus I'm spillin my heart out in this song//
the bitches say no and the bitches say go//
they say that they love you but they're just a damn ho//
but you try to move on and you try to stay calm//
but your tears of heartbreak stay fallin in your palm//
and we all know renegades and soldiers don't cry//
but there are times when we can't keep our feelings bottled inside//
your anger inside is about to explode//
and your heart is just cold and black like a crow//
so you cry and just cry and wish you could die and just die//
and you can't take the pressure becuz no on is on your side//
and it hurts so bad cuz the ones that you trusted and loved//
betrayed and destroyed you and just fucked you up//
When shit like this happens you wish you were under your gravestone//
but fuck it, leave those niggas shady and claim the streets that you roam//

gangstaaa haha

this was an aight piece , , but i think u can do better Fam.......

yea you kno I can dawg

tight shit. u need ta elevate though.

althopugh people have said you need to elevate......i still felt it..probablt cause ive been in th same situation as your explain ......realy hard to put into words too.....so you should get credit fo doin that cuase quite frankly you hit the nail on the head....although a bit more wordplay would have een apreciated

nice shit...keep spittin

yea I tried to add more but it wouldnt have flowed. And wordplay see my other opens mics

u do that

???? ok?

tight drop fam,,,, i felt is fosure n u can do better i no, but kid dis is better then most n ur just flowin na mean