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Old 11-16-03, 11:01 AM   #1
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win and lose but still i remember and smile

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I remember the day I met you
And the day God made you mine
I remember the day I lost you
And will till the end of time
But through all the tears and heartaches
There’s one thing that made me glad
That you chose me to share with you
The wonderful years we had
I often lay awake at night
When the world is fast asleep
And take a walk down memory lane
With tears upon my cheeks
I cannot bring those great days back
When we were together
But loving memories of the past
Will be with me forever


just something short and quick
but had to get it written down and out

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Old 11-16-03, 11:33 AM   #2
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This was cute.. it showed a lot of emtion... really there isnt much crit for me to say other than this was a good poem, it obviously got some feelings out.. nice job.
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Old 11-16-03, 12:18 PM   #3
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nice and cute
just a sweet lil poem
but a real poem
nice work,... good flows and you got your feelings out, ... and that, of course, is the most important thing
keep droppin
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Old 11-16-03, 01:21 PM   #4
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A great poem that came from your heart. Short and sweet. And may I say a great job. I personally loved it, and see nothing wrong with it. Memories are what ppl cherish and those help us go through life, even if they are painful. Flow was great and it came from ur heart with all of the emotion you had. Great job. Most respect.
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Old 11-17-03, 09:20 AM   #5
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Even as short as this may be it got me thinking deep. Taking the memories of me and my princess and holding them tighter to my heart. Wanting to hold her tighter to me and never let her go. Memories are good and bad. With her I want to make them a lifetime of memories till the end. as they say "till death do we part". Thanks filed I needed this. Much love and repsect. JT
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Old 11-18-03, 06:46 PM   #6
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thank you all for reading this
it was only meant to be a short and simple piece
i enjoy reading your replies to my pieces
makes me want to write more every time lol

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a collab with existance and me

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Old 11-18-03, 08:25 PM   #7
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wow....damn
this was nice
i can relate to all of this, it's crazy
the simple-ness made this piece more effective
portrayed the emotion, the sense of being over, but still holding on to the good times
this hit deep, i find that funny
but thats neither here nor there, nice piece girl
keep writing
i'll keep reading
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