This is something I just key'd up... I'm not bitin "Throw some d's on that bitch" either I'm just using it because its well known by everyone.

I mean...... I gotta get paid, ta get all my lady friends
"Throw some D's on that bitch!"went from an A to D Chest
now days its hard to say whos brains be best
I'm gaining all this knowledge, so I don't really stress
I remember once jockin a shorty for a moment
but the love never measured to the defeat, of an opponent.
euphoric feelin like, ya was puffin on crystal meth
needle in ya vein, flow injections of liquid death
I spit ta stress, betta yet ta.........strees relieve
wit two aces in my deck,and a trick up my sleeve
Ya wouldn't believe, half the shit I went thru
hittin blocks on the daily to hustle and make revenue
I usually keep it calm cause i'm blowin on sess
tourting niggas harder then infomants that fess'
I aint never have a pops to show me the ropes
family members now a days actin like they losin hope
tell em "in due time" imma make it witout movin dope
gone for now, until next time thats all he wrote.

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yeah bro this was a pretty dope ass little flow. stay up wit the rymes.

it was short but nice and smooth and i liked the way u used the multis.....good flow man......7/10

Thanks for the love yo.

ight this a decent piece. you had some pretty dope lyricism going on i feel that. ur words intertwined with each other they went along good with each other and were beyond basic.

the flow was good i could actually picture this being spit and not just read. i could picture it to a beat. most of the people round here cant flow for shit but u did a good job at it. so props on that

but the thing i think it lacked was originality and it wasnt too interesting. not saying that ur shit is boring but i think it lacks being interesting as in what your actually saying not how your saying it. i think u should start using your mind a lil and start finding new originial topics to approach and speak on shit that not much people have rhymed about. and i think u should get more personal not neccassirly whats actually going in your life but in your head. put you on display let people know what makes you up and why your diffrent from just any other shit in a can.

good job keep improving and like i said approach some new topics rather than just the same old stuff that u hear in songs. if whats in this rhyme is true then let people feel what u really mean by it. if u have any true feelings bout what your writing your gonna become more passionate and your gonna find your rhymes having lots more emotion and being in more depth. most of all whatever u say make sure its real. pc

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White Trash I want to thank you for that in depth post. All of what you said made sense, I'll feel what ya said about writing more original. I'm going to start making a conscious effort to be more original.

Thanks again for your post.

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