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04-28-07, 02:56 PM | #1 | ||||
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quick keystyle...
IP: 26FC 8E94
just a quick keystyle ....didn't think about it or read back to edit ...just did it...i was bored to....~1~
forensics im blessed with the evill spits to kill you/drill u do what i do lyrically mass murder your indivdual spirit to/listen u not worthy to live like inmates on death row/i bring death blows with my weapon to your brain watch the blood come out your head and nose/im strapped with ammo and tactics to lift u up in airs like zepplins/so testing me is not wise like taking untested pain killers for headaches/i push weights stronger than your punches i eat them too for lunches/have u astonished at my rhyme flow/ watch how my lines go/ straight to your heart breaking it like the 10 commandments/i break your leg then bandage it /so tight to cut off circulation like tourniquets/leaving u limb less like one armed vietnam war vets/bring more death to these assholes as i blast bad foes into paralyzation/causing families fustrated like sitting at a funeral in the precipitation/my flows destroy nations call them nuclear like irans electricity formations/ im impatient so i gotta beat u down like child abusers glorifications/in a strange situation im taking control like control freaks break down your whole fleet and shake down the bold and weak/yall fake clowns behold energy that i must take now to better me/ the steaks out to shred emcees so i make styles to head for glory/ the snakes out to bite with vengence my blades down but in a fight im relentless/killing the soft ones whos aims off with guns/ so i give them 3rd degree burns like if i put these lames in suns/measure your brain with a stun leave u derranged and body pumped/feel the flames as you jump up and down like doing jumping jacks/ insane im on these punks and funny to smack/the taste out there mouth what a waste of a knock down/cause u not ready for the ejection from this weapon of a hot round/ http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3163326 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...327#post3163327 ^^^^^^^^ my links |
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05-03-07, 09:24 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: A0BC FE33
cant front...
nice drop... couple hard bars in there and a few good punches... i like the raw gutta flow it gets me more hype... ya flow was good but fix ya structure plez.... u got a few qoutables but i'll be back to give you those nice drop... 8.9/10 hit me up for a collabo... |
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05-03-07, 11:48 AM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 33E3 44D7
this was nice.....you tight homie... if I keep going I'll just be tellin u wut another niggaz said just keep writin n spittin
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05-03-07, 09:55 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: CF86 0039
ok not bad.. would have been better if u put it in order and not all cramped up like that... some lines good. some multies. overall not a bad read. could have been better but like u said it was a keystyle and u didnt care.. so this like a freestyle and for a freestyle that was good to me.. no doubt....
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05-07-07, 09:17 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 26FC 8E94
thanks for the feed-back yall.......my bad on the structure....i'll make it better for future freestyles....whatup ransum...let me know bout the collabo topic or just off the top... etc....~1~
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05-08-07, 01:19 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 8FB1 3D8E
K-M if you wanna collabo on something hit me up aight one 1....
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05-09-07, 01:51 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 266E CC15
nice drop structure kind fuked but it is a keystyle liked the punches main keep em comin, would like to see sumtin written...
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05-09-07, 06:26 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 07D2 BAC0
I didn't really like how its all crammed.. But I can't front this piece is hot... you had some pretty dope bars... Keep elevating
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05-12-07, 09:58 AM | #9 | ||||
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IP: 26FC 8E94
thanks for the feedback yall.....ransum check your message box i drop my verse for the collab in there ... ~1~
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