Im not gon let u hit me again
Dats the last time watch i got a plan
IM sick of seein bruises on top of me
Im sick of seein tears run down my cheek
Gain some respect and love for me
All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face
But the next time you hit me
It aint gone be like this
You gon be shock when i come back with my fist
Yea rite now you think ima fool
Dat im gon take it
Yea rite im sick and tired of yo shit
Im tired of cryin myself to sleep
Then we make up you say you sorry
Then you get mad and hit me again
Im sick of this
Im done in though with you
Its over im leaving you
And there's nothing you can do
Cause when im walkin out
All you gon do is shout
Wishin i would stay
But u know what im gon say....

hey can some1 comment on my poem

hey this is a gud poem..... the topic is a reel one. the imagery was reel gud. the word wernt expressed in a complete matter but it was there an i i get tha jest of it

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But the next time you hit me
It aint gone be like this
You gon be shock when i come back with my fist
Yea rite now you think ima fool


keep droppin
return tha favor
( me amabu n wher i go )

....bless

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it is a deep topic. i think u should get more descriptive with ya feelings though. i read this & feel like yeah u r tired of the abuse but not tired enough to leave.

thx fo da comment

good emotion i like it us betta vocab

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All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face
But the next time you hit me
It aint gone be like this
You gon be shock when i come back with my fist

Agree with MA, most abusive relationships break-up 6 times or more before they actually end. This sounds like that. It's being mad without understanding. None-the-wiser. It's good, don't get me wrong, needs some more thought though.

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I feal you that was a great poem and a great topic

hot stuff!

thx fo da comment

i loved it..madd deep ma fave part:
"All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face
But the next time you hit me
It aint gone be like this
You gon be shock when i come back with my fist"

i got tha pic in ma head u kno....it almost wuz a TINA TURNER and IKE thing...lol
GREAT POEM

Great Poem! I like that and it sounds like you wrote that straight from the heart! Do Ya thing girl you'll get noticed in a big way!

this was one of those that kinda make ya heart go out places ya know? I aint gonna sit up here and get all sentamentally so umm my fave lines was
"All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face
But the next time you hit me
It aint gone be like this
You gon be shock when i come back with my fist"

tyte ish

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I'm definately feelin that. Keep up tha good work!!

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