When you look at me what do you see
I can guess
A dude that packs a glock
That stays cocked
Ready to pop
NOT
I’m a regular dude
Not a fool
Educated
Still hated
People think I steel and rob
Your hate needs to stop
I don’t have a gun
You don’t need to run
I don’t have a son
By 8 different ladies
No raisin 8 different babies
So no reason to even hate me
I just want to buy a book of some sort
To increase my vocab
No rehab
Not a crack attic
Not a drug dealer
Not a chronic stealer
I’m smart
Educated
Still hated
Poetical MC
Not flashy and addicted to money
When you look at me what do you see

Wow, nice piece. I like how you gave your analysis of urself. Good job of that. It seems to be a problem with everyone, ppl judge by ur appearance. They judge you, yet they dont take the time to even get to kno u. Good job with this. Keep it up.

wow
never heard anything like this
very unique indeed
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I haven't read many with such short lines but the ones I do read seem to be really good. These types seem more poetic to me. So much said in so few words. By reading this, looks like you have a talent for it.

When I read it, I got the feeling you just sat down and wrote something out real quick. Something that got to bothering you and you wanted to vent. Might not be how it happened but whatever. I feel the same way but only the opposite. People see you as a gangster? People see me as being really innocent. I got one of those faces, you know? Annoying as hell but I got out of a few speeding tickets with it so I can't complain

Anyways, Nice writing. Keep on posting your stuff up here.

great great great
i loved it
i liked the semetry of it and how u put the entry statment at the end as well
great piece of work
keep posting i would love to read more

thanks eerybody...i am glad that you can see the talent of the poem..upp

This was a nice piece. Your word play was nice, and the length of the lines fit the topic and flow of the piece very well. It made me think how many people, mostly all people, judge by what they see on the outside. I think the last line gave the piece the most power. I didnt take it as you just repeating the first line in the piece, but as you wanting to see what a person see's after you just expressed the steriotyping and labeling they do before getting to know you...wanting to know what they have to think now that you made all their assumptions invalid. This was a nice read. Keep it up.

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Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
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the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

This was really good.... I felt like I was in your head, and you had just stepped into a store, the store owner gave you a funny look, and this is what went through your mind...
To be brutally honest, you almost lost me at the glock line, bragging about guns just doesnt float my boat... but I went a little further and was relieved to see 'NOT' .. and kept reading.. to be pleasantly surprised by a really nice read. Thanks LB.

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wow...the short lines and words you mixed it with was great...great cuz it seemed to me that you said everything in a couple of words...you showed us at least me that we don't need long poems with never ending sentence were the plot is always the same....keep it up


peace