slower track I wrote a long ass time ago... just fixed it up a bit... prolly not the final cd version what youll be listening to, but all the same thought I might aswell post up n get some feedback on a deeper track cause I been giving all you mother fuckers feedback you can all RTF...

Statistically speaking.mp3 - 4.22MB

http://www.zshare.net/audio/5402342682104d0c/

its a track about people ive known, nothings a fabel its all real life shit, letters to people, some alive some not... havnt figured out the final track order yet so i dunno where itll be placed... but bonapetite...

i aint posting links because this forum is littered with my feedback.

thats me on the hooks btw.

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Like the laid back feeling of this beat man.

Your flow is pretty smooth, and you switch it up quite a bit which is nice. Quality wasn't bad, what kind of shit you rocking these days?

Your lyrics are pretty deep. Loved the "diamond, live for the thrill" shit.

Your delivery was laid back, but almost too much. It got boring as the track progressed.

Hook wasn't bad at all man. You sound completely different, I never would have been able to tell if you didn't say anything.

Keep it up man, this isn't shabby at all.

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i gotta change the intro so it doesent have that fucken wack synthesis thing too before the album release.

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Yeah man, definitely polish this shit up.

And if you need another voice for a track or two for your album let me know.

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i think that slap back or echo u use through out your vocals prevents my american ass to understand u as much, but i understand u more on here than usual. and i think it would be more effective if u said like who they were to you rather than just talkin about a person in a situation, if u said like you were my homie or my home girl more and talked about home much u cared about the person and how much it hurt to see someone that close slippin. and the hook, u sound good when your sayin words but when your just makin the ew ew thing, i aint diggin that. but when u sayin life aint never been easy, it good, and when your singin in the back round of the verse, is a really good idea, sounds professional.
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the beat isn't that commercial and your more or less just talkin rather than rappin, which is good on these types of tracks but idk if u quiet hit it or not, real close though. if i could understand u more it would be much doper, maybe do adlibs clearer on the catchy punchline parts would help.

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i might be changing this beat alltogether...

cheers for the feed guys, i am taking everything you cats are saying seriously.. thats the reason for posting them here, sort of like a pre-release that nobody in my local scene will ever get their stinkin hands on lol.

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you have some serious quality issues if you plan to put this on a cd...your voice would need to be louder. your dubs need to be aligned better, and you need to eq a bit. im having problems hearing what your sayin, not cuz your accent, but cuz your verse is living in the lows, and its muddying up syllables that sound the same back to back....you need to play with that....you need less reverb. and it also helps if you pan your reverb a bit like 15 to the left...what program you mixing with? what are you doing to your vocals....they need to be touched up for a wider audience you dont need to change your style just production....
does remind me of some 95 rap song....your about that storytelling type rap....its a fresh reminder of songs i used to love....just gotta touch up some things on your production....read some tutorials ....are you the one singing? or is that the beat....the cuz end made me think it was you, and if it is, thats a nice touch...you have the concept of writing a song down instead of writing lyrics. witch is good...just look up some production stuff

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