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03-31-04, 10:30 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Dead Man's Keystyle (a morbid one)
IP: FD47 43D3
As the hollwtips splatter brain fragments to dust/Dead men sing no songs but this dead muthafucka bust/from the day that I lay 6 deep in a grave/or when they found my remains in a darkened cave/I crave and desire to feel life and mix/at the river styx I was bound to tha crucifix/I sing this sad song all day everyday/where I lay can't move just stay in this dark grave/rottin my muthafuckin skin to the bone/ I'm all alone and the only thing I want is home/you bust chrome to my dome but the flow goes on/Because i don't stop can't stop keepin' with the struggle/i want revenge for my death like a battle rebuttle/theres so much left to feel so much left to explore/Soul fell too hell in 2004/ fuck it I guess I'm just dead!!
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step up and get merked cuz i take care of bidness/ A killa without witness from the start to the finish/ you're fallin off like you came down with tha sickness/ cuz when you step to tha Phreak I'm gonna leave you dickless HASTA LAVISTA MUTHAFUCKA!!! A-1 Lyricists |
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03-31-04, 02:14 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: C516 D54A
This was a decent drop.. Point was well crossed out.. Your rhymin stayed on target.. Try to work on ya structure a bit bro.. But Nice drop. Overall an 7/10.. Keep Spittin dawg.. holla.. 1
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04-01-04, 12:21 AM | #3 | ||||
....Trunks R 4 Bodies....
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IP: C1DA C961
the strutcher wasnt great but good rhyme scheeme........
overall good shit...... one love..... |
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04-01-04, 01:05 AM | #4 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: 6804 D41F
good rhyme
dont write in paragraph form try to expand vocab a lil
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04-02-04, 10:14 PM | #5 | |||||||
Suspended: Cheating
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IP: 4289 77F4
that was great rhyming.
alright form. keep doin what your doin. |
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