MALB

I hate poetry your liberty speech...your soul is one id love to reach-
depression is saddening yes that is true---but where would we be without you?-
a simple ryhme scheme to this poem that will follow-
only to show you that this poetic heart is not so hollow-

DOPED:
Drowning in this liquid that reflects his soul
grasping for one touch something I can hold~

Beauty replenishes the tears that have previously ran down his cheeks.... remembering the days that he brought the sunshine out amidst the rayne wait n pause listening to the silence hoping soon that he speaks~
Speaks words of wisdom words of trust...words of love n words of lust~
lets take the journey lets travel the distance...never let you fall behind not for an instant~
Distraught thro dementicia...I'll mend this broken angels wings...sturdy his shaky hands while mother nature threatens and father time sings~
MALB I have the hopes in sight that we can make it thru anything that disaster releases....destroy the past hurt n leave in in the do’ers faces...leave it in the same places...undisclosed... no traces....~
boy for you I’d trade it all hand you my subtle skills in hopes that you‘d no longer hate poetry...,listening to your voice that speaks of a love song...I hear the melody reach out n touch me...seeing it as your words it reaches out n abducts me....
want nothing more than for you to just love me~
be the angel here n above me...malb there's nuttin I wouldn't do...nothing I couldn't resist giving u...if you’d only love this poem(for get the hate n never rest alone)
Spending eternal nights in the midst of your poetries arms....covering me protecting me from the worlds many problems....
Boy you've got to listen you've got to understand that you've touched so many---when it comes to love malb...trust theres plenty-

ill shit ma, very emotion felt, very nicley laid out, well put together, nice structure, this piece had a bit of elegance to it, nice shit, keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

aww hazy i dont no what 2 say


Speaks words of wisdom words of trust...words of love n words of lust~


i like that line but i feel like ive let u donw now in some way 4 what i said 2 u last night

"want nothing more than for you to just love me~"

honestly

"if you’d only love this poem"

i do love the poem lol


ive had a few pieces dedicated 2 me but probably none as beautiful as this
thank u very much
i shall tresure this piece 4 along time

keep posting

LMAO oh no i jsut relaized yo umay have gotten teh wrong impression

LOVE me was meant to be me as speaking as poetry

not love me as shaynea

errr hard to explain ill aim ya n tell ya

n thatnk you diverse
means alot

iight

wow this was a good piece!! the only thing that i found hard was the format it was in a kept getting lost, but once read twice it just blew me away. perhaps i dont understand the LOVE part of it that you said is hard to explain but even the way i see it its a good piece. and its a piece that makes you happy and glow, thats not seen to much here.

Distraught thro dementicia...I'll mend this broken angels wings...sturdy his shaky hands while mother nature threatens and father time sings~

^ that there stuck out to me it was those lines that are stuck in my head now because i find them so beautiful and unique. i think this was well drawn out and expressed feelings so powerful. good job yet again

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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i like it hazy, actually i like it alot, i'll now make sure i dont just pay attention only to my own stuff, i need to see that there is alot more people out there with some damn good shit (like urs), so thankyou for pointing that out to me, and peace

good drop, flow was on point, rhyme scheme and vocab was upped, everything was put well together an creative. Hit me up an tell me wen ya droppin our callab...thanks hazy peace

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Hm... I could say a lot of things. All of which positive, none of which could do it justice.

I just want to say that this was a very heartwarming peice and if you make a move on my man it'll be your head on a platter.

Wait... that came out wrong. What I ment to say seriously, was that this really was a heartwarming peice and it just seemed to pour out some deep things in the mind that rarely surface.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Yea I seen he may have taken it the wrong way. I could comprehend everything, flow and how you put it was very amazing. Hazy I enjoyed this and it more than caught my attension. spect JT

thank you very much for the replies lol@ necro head upon a platter eh?

ill take that as a warning even tho i never put a move on him being as he's a bizzziloin miles away he just made me realzie that i cant let him hate ALL poetry
tada

Eh...

Kinda lost me a few times....
I dont claim to understand poetry so I guess that'll happen...

Read it a couple more times and while I still dont undersatand its deeper meanings and whatnot I know you came with nice imagery with some good emotion...

Also always enjoy how you add some flow to your pieces...

Good work ma

Distraught thro dementicia...I'll mend this broken angels wings...sturdy his shaky hands while mother nature threatens and father time sings~
MALB I have the hopes in sight that we can make it thru anything that disaster releases....destroy the past hurt n leave in in the do’ers faces...leave it in the same places...undisclosed... no traces....~
^ fav line

good stuff!

keep it commin!

LoL u give the best feedback... but U left me ~BLANK~

~DIMEZ~

aka

LAdy D

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thanks lady i apprecaite it as well as you too chrit


thanks