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03-04-04, 06:32 AM | #1 | |||||||
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im kinda new at this so any help is appreciated
IP: C673 5474
well i stayed up and wrote this piece about my life and my opinions
i hope i get some feedback I lived my life in sin but my faith keeps me heaven bound, Sometimes i look at life and wish i could turn it around Nights alone when im reflecting, listening to my inner sound then waking up at night, ready to pound on the next bitch who disses me or the mid east people dont understand me when im nice, so im releasing the beast Im done giving advice to u bitches, i aint ur fuckin priest Too much drama for me to handle, so im waving goodbye All i wanna do is mind my own business and get fuckin hi so im spitting the real shit, this aint sum joke or a lie Bashar is ready to make his mark like the american pie Im an arabic soldier so I kno ur a lil bit scared ive had bitches threating me before and i neva fuckin cared I aint a lil kid anymore, my vision is no longer imparied now im a grown ass man now, always ready and prepared I aint neva been accepted, people just judged and fuckin stared they called me a wansksta, a faker with no game or any skill cant u get bitches get it straight, this aint a fuckin drill so shut ur big ass lips before i fuck up ur grill cause i got a fuckin liscense that says "ready to kill" You betta either step back or take a chill pill And after all is said and done, I'll be here standing still So take a look at my life and learn from wut i did cause this eighteen year old is no longer a kid i mite be a rookie and ill admit im new to the game but whoever fuckin said an arab cant get some rap fame so this is for anyone who ever wanted to make a name im puttin these haters to rest then im passin the flame tired of hiding my race and being put to shame cause dealing with this bullshit can drive anyone insane so theres only one way to get shit off ur brain pack urself a bowl and smoke good ol mary jane shes the only girl who helps you get through ur daily pain the suffering, the anger, the days with endless rain the times when u thought life was worthless and there was nothin left to gain So my message is real easy to understand, its quite simple and plain work hard at what u want, dont let things go in vain have ur fun while can, smoke herb but never touch cane keep a couple of friends close and watch ur fuckin back respect girls and treat them good, dont just holla and mack its real easy to lie and get girls in the sack but that means u dont like who u really are, and boi thats fuckin whack and finally be patient, listen and dont attack so thanks for hearing me out, now Bashar says that's a fuckin wrap
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"You want to rap and you got no battle, it's like havin' a boat and you got no paddle" -- Public Enemy "Mackin' is a game and everybody's playing it" -- Ice Cube "I'm an addict for sneakers, 20's of buddah and bitches with beepers" -- NAS The Ambitions of a Soulja |
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03-04-04, 03:18 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: C673 5474
uppin for any feedback
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"You want to rap and you got no battle, it's like havin' a boat and you got no paddle" -- Public Enemy "Mackin' is a game and everybody's playing it" -- Ice Cube "I'm an addict for sneakers, 20's of buddah and bitches with beepers" -- NAS The Ambitions of a Soulja |
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03-04-04, 05:37 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
It was straight man, for being new to the game. You kinda got the same style as me. It must be that Indiana flavor. (reppin' Ft. Wayne here). Not bad though. Think about using better vocab to shorten it and make it sweeter.
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03-04-04, 10:20 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: C673 5474
thanks man....im repping bloomington but i got some of my bois are from the wayne...repsent the napp ....thanks for ur input...
holla bac
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"You want to rap and you got no battle, it's like havin' a boat and you got no paddle" -- Public Enemy "Mackin' is a game and everybody's playing it" -- Ice Cube "I'm an addict for sneakers, 20's of buddah and bitches with beepers" -- NAS The Ambitions of a Soulja |
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03-04-04, 11:57 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 75CE A0E1
that was sick. like world war said expand your vocab. i liked it. keep elevating.
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03-05-04, 08:53 AM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: C673 5474
I will work on my vocab, thanks for ur feedback...
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"You want to rap and you got no battle, it's like havin' a boat and you got no paddle" -- Public Enemy "Mackin' is a game and everybody's playing it" -- Ice Cube "I'm an addict for sneakers, 20's of buddah and bitches with beepers" -- NAS The Ambitions of a Soulja |
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03-05-04, 04:57 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: EC0B 84C7
Damn!!! That was red! I wish my rhymes was that slik. I can relate to ALOT of the things you sed to.
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03-07-04, 12:09 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
that was nice and it flowed well
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03-07-04, 11:41 PM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: B53A 1E53
I took some people's advice and i revised it and added a chorus....
Take a Look Inside I lived my life in sin but my faith keeps me heaven bound, Sometimes i look at life and wish i could turn it around Nights alone when im reflecting, listening to my inner sound then waking up at night, ready to fuckin pound fuck u racist bitches, my anger is starting to mound so here my warning to u , dont disrespect the middle east no one heard me when im nice, so im releasing the beast Im done giving advice to u bitches, i aint ur fuckin priest So take a look inside my life and glance up at the skies god keep me from all these evil sinner and their lies fuck the drugs and alcohol, who need these crooked highes maybe when ur confused like me......shit take a look in my eyes Too much drama for me to handle, so im waving goodbye All i wanna do is mind my own business and get fuckin high no more covering up people's dirt, im ready to fly so im spitting the real shit, this aint sum joke or lie Im ready to fuck the world like its the american pie Im an arabic soldier so I kno ur bitches are kinda scared ive had niggas threating me before and i neva fuckin cared I aint a lil kid anymore, my vision no longer imparied im a grown ass man , eighteen years got me well prepared I aint neva been accepted, people just judged so I stared wishing for anyone to swing first, but no one fuckin dared So take a look inside my life and glance up at the skies god keep me from all these evils people and their lies fuck the drugs and alcohol, who need these crooked highes maybe when ur confused like me......shit take a look in my eyes Haters called me a wansksta, a faker with no game or skill cant u get bitches get it straight, this aint a fuckin drill so listen up to me before i have aus fuck up ur girll then leave ur families guessing who throw u over that fuckin hill My fuckin liscense is deadly with a label that reads "ready to kill" So either step the fuck back or take a chill pill Cause i got arabs who will fuck u up, we always stand still U motherfuckers cant never move us, we just too damn ill So take a look inside my life and glance up at the skies god keep me from all these evils people and their lies fuck the drugs and alcohol, who need these crooked highes maybe when ur confused like me......shit take a look in my eyes i mite be a rookie and ill admit im new to the game but whoever fuckin said an arab cant get some rap fame so this is for anyone who ever wanted to make a name im puttin these haters to rest then im passin the flame tired of hiding my race and being put to shame cause dealing with this bullshit can drive anyone insane so theres only one way to get shit off ur brain pack urself a bowl and smoke good ol mary jane shes the only girl who helps you get through ur daily pain the suffering, the anger, the days of endless rain the times when u thought life was worthless and there was nothin left to gain So take a look inside my life and glance up at the skies god keep me from all these evils people and their lies fuck the drugs and alcohol, who need these crooked highes maybe when ur confused like me......shit take a look in my eyes So my message is real easy to understand, its quite simple and plain work hard at what u want, dont let things go in vain have ur fun while can, smoke herb but never touch cane keep a couple of friends close and watch ur fuckin back respect girls and treat them good, dont just holla and mack so when this beat ends, dont be talking that fuckin smack cause sooner or later, me and aus gonna have jordan up on the map represting all the sand niggers from toronto to the dirty napp so get off my nuts already, cause thats a fuckin wrap feeback please....thanks
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"You want to rap and you got no battle, it's like havin' a boat and you got no paddle" -- Public Enemy "Mackin' is a game and everybody's playing it" -- Ice Cube "I'm an addict for sneakers, 20's of buddah and bitches with beepers" -- NAS The Ambitions of a Soulja |
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