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04-23-05, 10:40 AM | #1 | |||||
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when the sun goes down
IP: F30C BA63
when the sun goes down, u best be ready
cuz money and fiends are gon b steady so get yo burnas, and clean'em good a jug try to rob then light up the hood clap at him, like u givin a applause and dont stop shootin till u hit his fuckin jaws have the fiend talkin like 50, without all the skills ima slang ima rob jus to pay all the bills i got a team clickin when the sun goes drop i got a team clickin, when a gun goes pop u could call me the mvp quarterback and thas the story cuz i trow bricks n bundles at my team, jus for glory see money is good but respect is better i dont got squirt guns but theyll leave u wetter then a bed in a old persons hospitol fuckin wit me or my money there wont be no obstical bodys get dumped in a undisclosed location if u cross me out u best to be like mason(ma$e) and go hide, an try to find the lord but let it be known, ima cutcha fuckin cord cuz thats what happens when the sun goes down thas what happens, everynight in the t-town hahah jus a lil quick drop for every one, i kno some gon hate, but to the haters...u get a kill yo self
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for all these niggas that say i cant rap, nigga i dont rap any way, i ROBBBBB -crunchy blac(three 6 mafia) i get high like the birds and the planes, i get high when bullets hit faces after words are exchanged -styles p(the lox) u betta tell yo man wit the gauges im nice, i'll shoot up yo white shirts till yall look like dice -I 20 Quote:
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04-23-05, 08:58 PM | #2 | |||||
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IP: F30C BA63
upppppppppppppppppppppp
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for all these niggas that say i cant rap, nigga i dont rap any way, i ROBBBBB -crunchy blac(three 6 mafia) i get high like the birds and the planes, i get high when bullets hit faces after words are exchanged -styles p(the lox) u betta tell yo man wit the gauges im nice, i'll shoot up yo white shirts till yall look like dice -I 20 Quote:
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04-23-05, 09:03 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
you need to drop feedback links, just so you know......but i didn't mind this, had nice flow, maybe its cause im drinkin right now, or that im listenin to some rap, but its wasn't bad..........i suggest fixing your structure, just make it a paragraph, for flow/structure reasons, word, and some lines were stertched, keep up
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04-23-05, 10:10 PM | #4 | |||||
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IP: E195 8305
dont listen to him... that shit was pure garbage... the topic was played to death. no dope punches. word play metas or anything needed to create a decent verse. the gun talk is so unoriginal. man come on i know u can be more creative than this. the drug talk is old and unneccessary. gah!
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