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Old 01-09-04, 06:55 PM   #1
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Lyrical Villains

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Lyrical villains-anti legally stealin
respect from those dealin
wit opposite feelins
talkin about bein a baller i heard it before
and the love you claim for the game i charish it more
i brought flow straight from the ghetto to neutral grounds
eatin so many fake rappers i gained like 50 pounds
in the west im the illest mc around spittin sick flows pumpin up the liyrical sound
i dont live in the projects per say
but i grew up in the hood runnin criminal ways
growin up without my father and many a days
stayin inside cuz outside they bussin them kays
like wolverine i rip any cat who wanna dance
i rip yo ass like sponge bob ripped his square pants
and that goes for any cat who be squealin
but in the rap game face it ima lyrical villain

for all ya'll dudes who really wanna get at me
you freeze in yo tracks when you hear my ghetto melodies
im a lyrical villain commitin felonies leavin cats shook like when they girl see a celebrity
i keep it gangsta stay on mc celebacy
i never get fucked by a cat who wanna yell at me
i could use complex words like its a spellin bee
got no love for no little bitches gladly go to hell and be
cool knowin i ripped you like hoes rip tricks
cuz tricks are for kids and more hoes a suck dicks
thinkin you sick you and you and your niggas could eat bricks you say tou rip niggas for fun nigga rip clicks
pay attention for what im bout to send you
its gonna end fatal i dont care what you been through
you gone pay for what your boys got you into
dealin with me you'll have to rap your head up like a hindu

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Old 01-10-04, 04:01 PM   #2
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your flows alright but your topic isnt very good and you need to work on your vocab too.just read the paper every now and then and it will help you with words. keep it up and elevate.

if you see any of my battles on the front lines take a look at them and give an honest vote, peace.
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Old 01-10-04, 08:04 PM   #3
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This was ok.....your structure needs some work though, you had some stretched out lines, try keeping your lines around the same length so its structured good and so it helps the flow out....you had some ok multies in this....but overall this was ok....keep at it.
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Old 01-11-04, 01:13 AM   #4
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You snuck a few good lines in here, and it definitely had a pretty strong flow, but overall, I feel like I've been there, heard that when it comes to most of the rhymes and subjects here. And I'm not referring to your being street, its just that when so many others come with that same content, theres a need for dudes to come at it from different angles, and i think more could have been done here.
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Old 01-11-04, 01:40 AM   #5
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I thought this flow was tight, your structure, use of words brought it all together, definatly a good read, like wormz said u might want to try another topic but other than that I thought it was nice, keep em commin'..
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