I was jus kickin it when this piece came to me so:

Some cats feelin like on the corner standin is the catalyst
I boogle the mind of lyrical analysts
the cannibus
keep me on edge tryin to deliver us
to meat market of rappers cuz im carnivorous
tryin to live up to my name keepin it villainous
makin sure every cat who read this shit is feelin us
cuz like a blood hound i can the smell the fear
on your breath and if i do im bound to cut you ear to ear
and watch the blood flow like a tear
filled with passion
bodies im stashin my styles never clashin
see cats dashin after i ate my ration of weenies i eliminate in an orderly fashion
guerilla warlike tactics
hit and run attacks what i practice
niggas aint ready for my antics
eat you like a lady prayin mantis
my rhymes to thick you cant weave through my traffic
im ready to abdicate my role as th king
and go on a journey and redeem my self esteem
by any means-when i spit its like magic
takin every word and syllable serious it'd be tragic
if i ever fumbled a sentence
killed and left back a witness
retaliate with the quickness
youre next on my hitlist
cuz i spit heat fire like a dragon
flowin and never braggin
ill do you worst then your bitch do you when she steady naggin
im the blood pumped when the beat thump like a heart beat
the bio battery spit with lyrical elite
im the lion in the jungle bringin you head pain
eatin suckas in my path at the top of the food chain

Damn yo, you got serious skills, I was feelin the whole thing, not a whole bunch of complicated words, good flow. Keep that shit up. Look forward to hearing more from you.

to meat market of rappers cuz im carnivorous


Huge potential with wordplay on that line if worded better..


cuz i spit heat fire like a dragon


however simple played line like this will hold you back....

this piece suffered horribly from a lack of flow...an multi's but was still decent..got the potential to elevate if you learn how to utilise the wordplay fully...