Yo your under my controll from the deep bowells of hell/
Got u wishin that nigga u shot never fell/
Well he did and your here/
No need to fear/
Stop shedding them tears/
Nobody will hear/
Better yet if they did u know they wouldnt care/
So sit back and shiver/
Ur bound to my lair/
U hear blood screaches and snares/
Abroad a poisoned black river/
Veiws of horrid that make lucifer quiver/
But dont worry u'll get ur share/
Within a week u'll tear apart ur own liver/
U'll consume all ur fingers and every last toe/
By the end of week 3 u'll be beggin for moe/
U'll be thinkin bout eatin your own vertibre/
U'll soon be ur body's very own prey/
If you could you would/
Better yet u should/
Get to a point that ur knawing on wood/
Wishing you could/
Have one decent meal/
But wish as u may that just isnt real/
U'll exhaust ur own body till you hurl over and speal/
Then u'll suffer from one u had chosen to kill/
The pain u have given you now must feel/
Only difference is your pain will not end/
Will continue on like an eternal bend/
In the belly of hell u have no freind/
Soon u'll write to god for mercy an shit/
This message u write big man 'll never get/
U'r hear for eternity/
Bow down on ur knees and don't dare to turn at me/
Simmer to bones and rot in my pit/
Makes u wonder if that girl was really worth it/
All this contemplating deep within my crypt/
All pissed off at sum nigga she licked...........

not to bad...ya flow was a lil choppy and you could work on your lyrics a lil but hey, everyone can improve. so just keep workin on it


could you vote on my battle with mad man vs LunkHead http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=40316

and could you peep my other one in open mic called "try out verse"