Just another quick throw down....
First things that came to mind....
Total of maybe a 15 minute piece...
Enjoy.....an drop sum feedback...pc*1*

Real
Yo im in a rage turn the page...
flip scripts an scrolls...forget polls.
i battle fer the reason of bein ILL..its simple..
to dent vets reps like dimples
poppin herbs like pimples....
its that simple....way i scribble on screen...
the cyber space?...more like caucasian space...
where honkeys can act'online witta few keys an back space..
erase...what they really are...
opposite off tar and off-well by far...

jump in the car lets go...its a place u neva seen...
its called the city...curbs draped wit crack feinds.
crime scenes and pregnant teens...

different from your suburbia lifstyle...
here the earth energized off vile...in a mild sense..
pre-tense or future...never been never will...
keep the text on'line but in life ya words fake..
like a scarface take...

u don't pop pills less' labled advil or tylenol...
its like im jumpin off stream-the white water fall-
like friday night at a mall...or Harvard laws hall..
when will it stop?..crooked cops...benz's in lots..
while the culture an integrity of the city rots...
its the end of the meltin pot...

feedback....

a lil simple but an ill as rhyme no doubt
i want to hear you on audios

i like it, it flows well and you rhyme more than 1 word per line

^^lolz...u don't wanna hear me on audio....

feedback....

Lets see overall I am going say it was decent, I could make it flow when I used it in my mind and when I droped it out loud so it was decent enough with a flow. For being done in a short time period of 15 mins it was good.

thought this was good for a read, and seemed that it should be read fast, which i like, yeah pretty good, i agree that it was a simple stlye, but i think it suited it..........