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Old 12-03-03, 11:25 AM   #1
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Corrupted Visionz:--Create Your Own Imagery

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.....Blissfully intwined in that thing you call Hesitation.....
.....the only other respect I give is to Divine Intervention.....
.....see both of these affect your life,In 1 way or Another.....
.....from the seed of all Creation, to the life of your own Brother.....
.....there feelings that are uncomfortable I jus cant describe.....
.....a compendium without the flow & a Song w/out the Vibe.....
.....its not easy to Define and to Hollow to cross the Line.....
.....if i could stand the truth then I'd make this Sonnet Mine.....
.....but in a way wot can i say...i stand tomorrow, i stand Today.....
.....I strive to make it years Away to maybe watch my Child Play.....
.....Explicit as it is...A Window to Escape is jus Solitude.....
.....for an over exemped mind..w/ a Conflicting Attitude.....
.....Devastating news for those who think they can Hide Behind.....
.....a Personality thats Dark N Grim, wen in all Truth you're Kind.....
.....Aggrevated Deception is another form of your Exemption.....
.....like a kid made to pay...still locked up in Detention.....
.....your still praying for Attention but i can't give it Out.....
.....my minds still unMatured..i can't tell you what its About.....
.....jus useless Advice locked up in a Grip Tight Vice.....
.....the Window goes to whole new levels jus like House Mice.....
.....so was the peace Affective...Did it help you to Make.....
.....a decision that prevents you...avoiding a Window of Escape.....
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Old 12-03-03, 06:20 PM   #2
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Yeah man this was pretty good.....it made for a good read i thought....you structure was real nice, nothing bad about it at all....your flow in this was pretty good i thought as well, it stayed on point most of the time i thought....i liked your vocab usage in this, very nice....overall this was a good piece...keep at it.
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