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12-03-03, 11:25 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Corrupted Visionz:--Create Your Own Imagery
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=91067
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...9633#post899633 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...9642#post899642 .....Blissfully intwined in that thing you call Hesitation..... .....the only other respect I give is to Divine Intervention..... .....see both of these affect your life,In 1 way or Another..... .....from the seed of all Creation, to the life of your own Brother..... .....there feelings that are uncomfortable I jus cant describe..... .....a compendium without the flow & a Song w/out the Vibe..... .....its not easy to Define and to Hollow to cross the Line..... .....if i could stand the truth then I'd make this Sonnet Mine..... .....but in a way wot can i say...i stand tomorrow, i stand Today..... .....I strive to make it years Away to maybe watch my Child Play..... .....Explicit as it is...A Window to Escape is jus Solitude..... .....for an over exemped mind..w/ a Conflicting Attitude..... .....Devastating news for those who think they can Hide Behind..... .....a Personality thats Dark N Grim, wen in all Truth you're Kind..... .....Aggrevated Deception is another form of your Exemption..... .....like a kid made to pay...still locked up in Detention..... .....your still praying for Attention but i can't give it Out..... .....my minds still unMatured..i can't tell you what its About..... .....jus useless Advice locked up in a Grip Tight Vice..... .....the Window goes to whole new levels jus like House Mice..... .....so was the peace Affective...Did it help you to Make..... .....a decision that prevents you...avoiding a Window of Escape..... |
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12-03-03, 06:20 PM | #2 | ||||
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Yeah man this was pretty good.....it made for a good read i thought....you structure was real nice, nothing bad about it at all....your flow in this was pretty good i thought as well, it stayed on point most of the time i thought....i liked your vocab usage in this, very nice....overall this was a good piece...keep at it.
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