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Old 12-08-03, 02:59 PM   #1
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go to any 5 posts here and i voted on them
DaO
Caramac
and any one else before this post




U CANT ESCAPE
the type of tribulations you gon enure
FULL OF HATE
and find ya family laid on the floor
YO MOTHER RAPED
and a note to be sure it hurts more
MUST BE FATE
cuz I wasn't gon be stopped no more
WHATCHO GON DO
bring yo crew and bring they friends too
THIS IS TRUE
they household gon be sad too
AND FOR YOU
ya gotta die for what you shoulda knew
IM NOT THROUGH
yall gettin sick from what Im bouta do
IS IT TIME
for the rapid reclination of my nine
FOR A FINE
Im takin yo soul to make it mine
FOR A SIGN
Ill hang yo boy from a telephone line
AND FOR YO MIND
bullets goin to yo head like strong wine


wrote this a while ago, just wondered what yall think
thx
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Old 12-08-03, 03:05 PM   #2
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ill say thats ok and you've got tha right words
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Old 12-08-03, 03:27 PM   #3
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This was alright i thought....something different, i liked it....flow was alright i thought....your vocab was alright as well, could have been a bit better though i thought, but still good....structure was good for this style i thought as well....overall this was alright...keep at it.
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