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Old 04-17-07, 06:17 PM   #1
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Write Away Your Thoughts

Ok welcome to week two people... well as you all know alot of no-shows last week, but be fair warned.. you no show this week you are booted. come one guys remember there is a prize at the end we are running a 10 week season and then a double elimination playoffs. im still thinking on eighter giving $100 dollars or 2 T-Shirts or a Pair of shoes. so you aint writing for nothing people.

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Old 04-19-07, 03:05 AM   #2
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"A War For Peace"


Some say we fight a lie, i see it eye for eye
The secretz in this warring are what makes the eagle cry
Its a dirty job to do, we're rollin as a crew
And someones gota clean the earth before our time is through
They've harnessed in our power, and crave they would devour
An end to what they see as evil growing in our hour
Ironic in the least, we're all against the beast
That threatens our existence to the point a nukes released
While terror runz amok, we race against the clock
To stop them gain the weapon that will fill the skies with rock
Already they are armed, these snakes cannot be charmed
And in these past few years our greatest minds have been alarmed
Their actions have no pride, their lives will be denied
Growing soldiers that will fight for god and fly to suicide
The battles in the streets, our infiltration seeps
And nothings guna stop us march to wage a war for peace
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Old 04-19-07, 07:04 PM   #3
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check'ing in fam....

good luck...
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Old 04-19-07, 09:47 PM   #4
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"Broken Angel"

the good times seems to never arrive as time pass by
most say you have to wait, but waiting is making me lose my strive
our lives i'll go no-where if we just stand an pray looking at god above
but he dont ever answer or confort us with hugs, so how can we call this love
most poeple never find the right person to be with
we just look any-where now a days, say hi and think she it
action speak louder then words........
an fucking on the first day means, love... yes we've achived it
dont know a thing about her, just her smile her looks an the liquer she sip's
the last piece to the puzzle complet, the way we flow together is like a ship
thinking about a family i always wanted but couldnt have due to my past
at-last, the 1st time we had sex a condom was something i never had
i said look baby dont worry and dont be mad...
she had a look on her face an sad baby i just want you bad
started licking on my neck, playing with my ears, wispering baby im wet
i said baby this is something YOU'LL NEVER FORGET, next thing u know we the bed having sex
1 hour, 2 hours... danm she look sexyer when she sweats
now she pulling hard and yanking-me, while im hiting it like i play for the mets
she starting to climax, im beging to cum, the best feeling about to come
toes curling like bk onion rings, my body start to feel num.. it burst out.... ahhh...its ova... its finally done
maybe there is a god after all, now we glad to go to church an say thank u jesus
but u cant jude a book by its cover, cuz after a few day we say we cant believe this
the angle of mines who i once thought came from jesus had something else she relesses
anyoning pain driving me incyane whos to blame?... gotta go to the doctor so he can see-it
the look on hes face wasnt one i expected, something i neglected.. can it be? is she sick?
thinking about last week an all the position we acomplish,
saying she very smart, a teacher who rather look up in the sky for direction insted of a compass
am just waiting in a clam sit, next thing you know the doc comes in looking like hades
he said, there somethings you need to know, dont act a fool just be brave
i said stop playing with me doctor, he said its something that requiers only 1 way to be made
i said WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT, he said son you should of used a condom cuz now you have aids......

the angle of mines had broken wings, cuz jesus aint send that angle
it was broken by a sin, and the devil wins cuz now im crashing my car till my body all mangle...

ITS OVA.....



news report said that a waitness said there was a man driving in a rage from lane to lane doing about 100 mph or more, all she said was i pray he makes the right choise, 2 exit later hes car was smashed into a tracktor trailor and the trunk was in the front seat on the car...... danm maybe hes angle had broken wings.......
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Old 04-22-07, 01:41 AM   #5
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Ransum - Alright concept, poor execution. You need to work on your flow, and your choice of words. One thing that is a terrible habit is to use the same word more than once, close together. You did that a few times.

Irrational - Your verse was, overall, of better quality than ransum's. Concept wasn't really original, basically it is exactly what I would expect from the war for peace topic. It would have been better to bring something unique, maybe you just didn't try too hard because of your opponent or something..

Anyway, V/ Irrational
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