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04-17-07, 06:18 PM
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Terumoto (1-0) vs. Faime S. Quotez (1-0)
IP: D40E 67D5
Write Away Your Thoughts Ok welcome to week two people... well as you all know alot of no-shows last week, but be fair warned.. you no show this week you are booted. come one guys remember there is a prize at the end we are running a 10 week season and then a double elimination playoffs. im still thinking on eighter giving $100 dollars or 2 T-Shirts or a Pair of shoes. so you aint writing for nothing people. Check In: April 18 Drop On: April 20 Rules Topics
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04-18-07, 03:41 PM
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IP: 2314 BF0A
Checkin in. Good luck T..
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04-19-07, 03:10 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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IP: BB88 B870
Checking in... GL to you too.
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04-20-07, 05:59 PM
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IP: AA44 EE0F
My topic is: "Broken Angel"
In the realms of heaven, a sight that all shall gracefully behold a male angel named Paul Hurtman was awaiting to be chose As a guardian angel, but he never did, so he'd sit everyday because every other angel around him got picked everyday Paul almost lost his mind, but one thing helped him keep it the Lord said, "Good things come to those who wait!", so he did One early morning, Paul heard the Lord's voice speak to him he was assigned to a woman on Earth named Sarah Peterson Sarah was divorced with 2 kids, a single mom with misery she worked as a teacher for 3rd Grade at Hughes Elementary She was walking to her car down the street, when suddenly... a car came up on the sidewalk headed straight at her She was so scared, she couldn't move... she panicked then, Paul came and jumped on her seconds before the car landed She thought she was dead, and asked if he was God at all Paul replied, "Ha, yeah that's me... but you can call me Paul." They got up, Sarah thanked Paul and hugged him, and started to flea Paul cried, "Wait.... can I buy you a cup of coffee?" Sarah blushed, and accepted.. so when they went to Starbucks they started talkin', laughin', flirtin'... they had hard lust Then, Sarah asked, "How did you come out of nowhere to save me?" Paul, trying to keep secret his disguise, replied, "I don't know, it's crazy!" Paul walked her home, when he got on the porch to make sure she's in Sarah gave him a kiss on the cheek, and said, "I hope I see you again." Paul left, lovestruck.... and went back to give her his number too since then, they've been havin' fun and their friendship is wonderful A couple months later, while Paul, Sarah, and her kids were playin' around Paul felt somethin' wrong with his heart, felt like it was slowing down He told Sarah he had to leave, and left... he became weak he went to an alley and fell to the ground; then, the Lord began to speak The Lord said, "Paul, you've completed your assignment, well done. Your time has expired on Earth, it's time to come home, son." Paul felt overwhelmed and started to cry, but he turned to the Lord, stood and asked, "Well... at.. at least can I tell Sarah I'm leaving for good?" The Lord replied, "Yes. But you only have 24 hours to say you're going away!" Paul sadly accepted his words because he wanted to stay The next day, Paul went to Sarah's house, and sat on the couch Sarah asked, "When you left me yesterday, what was that about?" Paul replied, "I haven't been truthful about myself. It's all wrong." Sarah sat down, looked Paul in the face and asked, "What's going on?" Paul looked deep in Sarah's eyes, and saw beauty beyond view and began to say, "I.... I..... I.... I LOVE YOU!!!!" All of a sudden, Paul's time on Earth expired, the clouds had to fall heaven's gates opened, and the Lord said, "Come, Paul" Paul was overwhelmed, his adrenaline started runnin' and... with a loud vioce, he told the Lord, "I'M NOT COMIN'...." The Lord instantly took Paul's wings away, he felt betrayed so he gave Paul 100 more years of age... And promised Paul, "From now until the world's end I will never accept you as an angel again!" The result is a "Broken Angel", from above what could break the unbreakable: Love... 
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04-21-07, 12:34 AM
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IP: 9465 0DDF
will edit this in with a VOTE.
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04-22-07, 08:46 AM
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IP: 9465 0DDF
dude this is hard to do man..
TER- Loved your verse man was so emotional and was just really deep with nice flow of things. you came with a shitload of emotion man with your poetry man i liked how you took the topic and just took it to you rleverage and just conquer your piece man! Faime- you also came well man i liked your whole approach you came with topical yet you did a shitload to show your emotion man i loved it.. sometimes peices for OM's are held back from the whole rhyme thing but you my friend just brought this out nicely! now im gonna do something in good grace. both of you get a win. why?! because you guys have been both dropping conssitantly especially you TERUMOTO!. both these pieces here did well so i am giving both a win but dont take it for granted i am only doin gthis once ina while so conscider you guys the first to recieve!
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