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First ta 5
No dr, no feeding, hating, crew,
Experienced voting
You spit first

IIGHT

Guess wat?? Im back betta den ever....................//
All my rhymes I spit are really clever....................//
I take it serious when ever I spit.......................//
When I step to the mic I make ur whole game split//
U come spit and u have the quality of **whit.....//
This dude think hes somethin big.................//
I dont know why I challenged this little prig//
U spit out more shit then an oil rig.....................//
I really dont think u have an instrest in bein here//
If u ever step to me again I`ll end ur whole career//
My rhymes kik ass around the whole sphere....//
I have just taken this battle with wangle......//
Ur verses are a mess so they begin to tangle//
DONE

Oh yea and I put ** next to whit cuz it means very little quality

Its not about untold truth, cuz you admit your skills unknown
we all see your name an Dynasty soldiers ill leave that subject alone./
but its time to move on, haven alot of green wont help your luck son
see leprechuans, win, your sex life, none exist and i mean not one/
Im pushin you to the point, but thats prolly gunna burst your balloon
Come on son, im not kidding around anymore, whats with the cartoon/
i know you jack of to spider man but, damn, your avatars ridiculous
Jump off his dick would be the precise word but im not meticulous/
Welll fuck.... Im pretty sober, and tryna stay that way with my rhymes
so please excuse my actions as i proceed to say fuck these two last lines

Upping this to get some votes

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Upping for votes

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Up.

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Vote- Outcome, almost by default.

Skills- your opening lines were beyond elementary. You may as well have open with "Hi my name is Skills and I’m here to say, I’m the greatest rapper in the U.S.A!" Basically you just talked about how great you are and how you'd end his career. That being said, your only real punch was like " dont know why I challenged this little prig// U spit out more shit then an oil rig".

Outcome- I dunno, your verse was alright. Certainly good enough to. You could've taken a few extra minutes to read it and make little corrections. For instance...

" know you jack of to spider man but, damn, your avatars ridiculous
Jump off his dick would be the precise word but im not meticulous/"
- Making word, become wording would sound alot better.

Also weak closer, kinda came off like a line from 8 Mile.

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"I’m a mercenary, I don't care how I get richer,
Like American companies that did business with Hitler"
-Immortal Technique

upping

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out come that was clearly a victory. You packed more punches and ya agressiveness here was a big factor.
skillz seemed like you ended ya flow by chopping off the 1st 13 lines on another one.
That was a very inaffective close. Didn't care for the opening either.
outcome while it wasn't spectacular it did get the job done.

question- outcome: how do you find the time to brake down all these votes
probably the best voter on rb.
alos you forgot to poll... on my battle

but this is how i broke it down

skillz- nice sig.. no offense but probably the only thing that was catching my attention in your verse. you needed to concentrate more on punches and not rhymeing about yea self. learn wordplay,matta a fact just go to the wackness emergence center, no disrespect

out come- came with simple punches, what i think was a personal towards the crew in the 2nd line?
Its not about untold truth, cuz you admit your skills unknown
we all see your name an Dynasty soldiers ill leave that subject alone./
but over all you took it with the personals and punches, flow was a lil chopy i think you could of straightend that out

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upping for more votes..

eh i dunno i just think of giving honest feed back so maybe people will take it into consideration.

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Damn, upping for votes people...

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outcome took this battle easily..unknown your verse was very basic and weak, you had no real structure or flow and you didn't even use a single punch or personal..look at some other verses to get ideas to help you elevate. outcome, you had some creative wordplay and punches, a normal structure and flow so you get my vote on this battle........

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