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Old 10-12-04, 10:45 PM   #1
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Unhappy R.i.p.

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this goes out to my friend Rachel who died on 10/11/04


at times like this i sit and reminise
wondering how and why it came to this
the end to our joy end of our happiness
it all ended with the swerve of a wheel
will the people ever know the truth of the appeal
we havent talked in so long and i dont know why
but its too late, too late to give us another try
only god knows the real reason why you were meant to die
fly with open wings right to the gates of the lord
one more soul lost but i wont forget the memories stored
trying to figure out how u swerved across that road
struck that van, tractor trailer demolished all dreams and hopes
memories will never fade of the day i herd of the murder that wrote

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angels are always heaven bound
you'll never end up in the undergroud
i'll meet you at the gates of heaven
on the tenth month day of eleven
only thing i can remember is your beautiful face
but you were too good to leave early, to leave this place


lets go back tot eh days were we used to be
dont you see i miss the days you rode with me
it wasnt supposed to end this quick
i wish there was some way that i could fix it
no need for you to increase the deceased count
tears rolled down my face as i read what the paper released out
scream, shout it never seems to help
cuz your gone and theres nothing worse that i felt
your death runs threw my mind so fast
i will never forget the good times we spent in past

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angels are always heaven bound
you'll never end up in the undergroud
i'll meet you at the gates of heaven
on the tenth month day of eleven
only thing i can remember is your beautiful face
but you were too good to leave early, to leave this place

i keep hearing of your passing time and time again
ppl ask what happend and then they try to cope and tend
tend to my feelings and sorrow cuz i just lost a true friend
you always were there to comfort me when i was down
made me feel better and got rid of my frowns
you took me aside and showed me your feelings inside
dont abide by the rules cuz they just did nothing but made us fools
tools cant mend this broken heart back to the shape it was in
am i supposed to just walk around and act as if nothing happened
cant hold back the fears, tears as i look into your lonely face in a coffin
understand that this girl meant more to me than any of my dreams
believe that the time comes for us all somehow, someway, someday
but i didnt want you to leave this fast not now, not this way, not this day
but remember that your always in my mind and for you i will pray
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Old 10-13-04, 05:35 AM   #2
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Old 10-13-04, 07:12 AM   #3
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I feel it for you bro.. R.I.P rachel........
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Old 10-13-04, 10:46 AM   #4
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what up i kno what its like to lose someone i lost my boyfriend. i aint gon say it's gonna get better soon b/c i was told that n it didnt n it jus hurt worse that i thought it was supposed to be better. but in ur own time n way u'll learn to deal wit it. n i kno what its like to not kno what happened. we were told he killed himself but nobody knows or ever will...not knowing is the most painful thing i've ever gone through. but keep ur head up n if u need to talk ill be here
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Old 10-13-04, 02:41 PM   #5
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thjanks for the feedback blazin and mental but as for hottness your a f~in herb ur just mad cuz we took your vote stupid herb ur whacked thats why ur now 0-8 loser
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Old 10-13-04, 07:31 PM   #6
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uppin on feedback mayne...........................
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Old 10-13-04, 11:33 PM   #7
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post some feedback pplz please .......... its much appreciated
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Old 10-14-04, 03:56 PM   #8
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uppin for some feedback dont just read this...tell me what u thought....peace~1
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Old 10-14-04, 04:13 PM   #9
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this was deep man, its fucked up that you had to lose a close friend like that, but its cool that you can express how you feel by writin about it. i aint dr. phil or no shit like that, but maybe thats a good way for you to cope, just keep writin what u feel dawg and just think of her as bein in a better place
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Old 10-14-04, 08:37 PM   #10
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thans man yeh its hard knowing she's gone now but ill learn to cope somehow.i normally express my felings in poems or rhymes anyhow so i figured i could give it a try on here so i did......thanks everybody for the feedback...keep it coming
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Old 10-14-04, 11:29 PM   #11
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Old 10-14-04, 11:46 PM   #12
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uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn on this feedback peoples
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Old 10-16-04, 12:10 AM   #13
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uppin ofr some feedback
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Old 10-17-04, 11:05 PM   #14
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uppin for some feedback on this...................
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Old 10-17-04, 11:57 PM   #15
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iight it was for a good purpose. Lots of emotion, but this is about lyricism. You gotta work on your rhyme scheme and sructure/flow a lil more. I like the lyrics and youre still learning so it was okay that it was kinda weak. Just keep working on your shit and it will all come out good in the end. R.I.P.
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