1977-

when I look to the sky,I wonder why my tears dont cry/
are they lost in lies,lost in despise of the wisemens lines from behind/
my eyes,minds twisted up a vision of so a called Heaven/
so I go to infinit from my incision in seventy-seven/


1977,the year my life was blessed from Heaven/
pops got to steppin,pops in my head was laid to rest then/
its a hard lesson,it started a heart of second guessin/
for the rest of life stressin,not to mention the tension that came to set in/
from Moms,blow jobs for johns with no clothes on/
always gone,dope in palm singin the song of right gone wrong/
not understandin,had hate for God cause I know He planned it/
straight left me stranded,empty handed man damn I'm branded/
with fatal sicknesses,from cradle been known to do the sickest shit/
a relentless kid,murderous intensions while bent-invent the sickest spit/
nothin can help,thats why I stay confined inside myself/
done cried whats left,died and came back two times like tribe called quest/
its forever flowin,and constantly growin-where-ever I'm goin/
I've been severin and sewin,deliverin bows-endeavourin lows and/
comin off often hypocritical,they had the coffin locked but I slid it forth/
past a kid at four,I've already walked ya'lls talk come see what I did it for

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dope!!!You have some good rhyme's in this.Nice structure,good flow, overall a nice drop..where you born in 1977?damn i was born nearly 10 years after you.....

lol...i think im older than 90% of the cats here...any way thanx for the feedback...it does not go un-appreciated...1

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all view but no reply

that probly how most you fagots get yer rhymes

not intended for none sleepers

lmao^^^ wow, i'm really feelin this piece, nice flow and descriptive vocabulary, and you set the scene up nicely, great content as well, your closing line was dope,,,,"come see what i did it for"....some good shit man,,,,,and there are some older heads on the site,,like me,well, i'ma year younger then you...lol

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yo this one is iight better then other one u wrote

yo...thanx for the feedback...i was uppin this piece so hard cause its like the only piece i have with 100% truth to it...F/M thanx for the "Real" feedback...1



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ayo good shit hommie, i was feelin it... keep up the good work dawg!!! you definatly put some feeling into it!

return some feedback on the open mic in my siggy! thanks man

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daaaaaaaaaaamn that was hot for real u had some good ass words n it flowed...u got some TALENT im impressed

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mos def...thank you all for the positive feedback...ima get to peepsiz shit here tonight a lil later and reply to all those that feeded me back...1 love

nice peice not bad for ur first topical 6/10

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