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Old 09-30-04, 03:00 AM   #1
LiL MizZ xO Ai
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U make duh hand yoo deal

IP: 1366 4BAB

This iznt 2 go against any one, i juss wrote whut i could.

Pleasure and pain all comes from duh game. Juss dun fuck up yo crewz game. You fuck the crew then they fuck you. You dun throw up C's den you neva goun die in one piece. They'll fuck you up/ make you stay real, n juss rememba u make tha hand you deal. My girls n me we gonna be famous g's. Fo eva throwin up C's. We know wat it takes to be D.A.B we got our rules, we play our game, Juss dun fuck up tha fame. Fo eVa stayin true. We always gun be sayin fuck you. Our pleasure and pain cums frum our game. We dish out our name and still remain. God bless you girls fo what eva we do. God bless all tha G's and always stay true.

^theres a first tyme fo everything. This iz myne^
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Old 09-30-04, 03:00 AM   #2
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Plz give me feed back.. im tryin tuh learn.

Thnx ..Shaii..
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Old 09-30-04, 10:12 AM   #3
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it was aight...im glad ya reppin for da girls thats 4 sho
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Old 10-01-04, 05:42 AM   #4
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yup^ i agree.. not many ppz reppin fo duh girlz.

Uppin fo mo feed back pleaze!.....................
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Old 10-01-04, 08:31 AM   #5
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Yeah not to bad for your first drop, you need to sort out your structure
coz that killed your flow it looks like a story so its hard to read.

Try writting in barz thats two lines,
and make sure the last words rhyme

You get me haha^ Like that get this down and you will be droping some
heat soon if you need help holla @ me ma.

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