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07-14-05, 02:05 PM | #1 | |||||||
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.:Waitin' For A Moment:.
IP: 0522 9CD1
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Hook x2 waitin for the moment, stadin under street lights but it just seems like i'll keep waiting under dim lights, til it's midnight but for the meantime i'll do lines to bleed rhymes Intro Hand me a mic and watch me bring your light briefly flash your life, in other words recite with one mic and stay illmatic til tha day i die cause i'm waiting for the moment and i'll tell you why....cause i'm.... Verse 1 Stand with no yielding lines, street lights or building signs designed for three to nine with no chance for free design of a better path, but i go back and never find a trail to follow chokin' half the time cause these words too stail to swallow cause once i get the alphabet, you bet i get lynguistic combine symplistic and realistic with a mystic style to leave you twisted anylistic and gifted to blow stars with heat waves cause my rhymes infest your mind, pull weaves and tweak brades highest in street grade, rhymes constructed and beats made ready to speak blades and throw razors that leave fades i've been made, and now i'm just holding on this moment keep from folding up and try to embrace this piece of time as golden cause i walk down avenues, streets, backyards and alleys too just to find myself and discover what it is i want from you what it is i want from life, what it is that a kid swicthin' his ribs just to see if it's himself that ain't matchin, whant from all of this but i'm under an angel's shadow, amred, equipped, ready to battle pull the pads and pens, blastin' tents, while i'm strapped though and until that day i roll into the everlasting trail of clouds astonish crowds and embelish rhymes when i open my mouth Outro May never find the exit or climb out of the window but even if i die, my rhymes glide as the wind blows and even if i'm plased in a casket or cremated into ashes i finally reached the end, finish line? i'm passed it Hook waitin for the moment, stadin under street lights but it just seems like i'll keep waiting under dim lights, til it's midnight but for the meantime i'll do lines to bleed rhymes
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07-14-05, 03:52 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 38B5 0CC0
oh shit man, you straight ripped this, no complains. this woz hot. multis were tight, and flowed perfectly. very, very impressive. 9.5/10
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07-14-05, 05:14 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 0522 9CD1
thanks messenger, you always givin' me feed dawg. Thanks Open Mic, glad you liked it...
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07-14-05, 07:53 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 72AA 464B
Thats some creative thinkin with the 1 verse an the intro an outro....It made it hott. you got some good hook an talent b
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07-14-05, 11:44 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 0522 9CD1
Yea, i didn't want it to be 2 or 3 verses, but instead the beat changes and i change my tone for intro and outro.
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07-25-05, 03:45 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 7494 5106
uppin this.........
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07-25-05, 03:56 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: B5E3 845B
this was good man, flowed really well, mutlies were good, vocab very good, nothin but props on this one man, keep it up
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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07-25-05, 05:48 PM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: D6D7 B7E8
thanks bro, can i get some advice or points ya'll like?
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07-26-05, 09:45 PM | #11 | |||||||
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IP: D6D7 B7E8
lol, thanks a lot. comments like those keep me writing. well read on chalk
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07-28-05, 12:00 AM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: 16A8 4BCE
7/10
good flow it got confusing at the end but tight. loved this made me laugh. ""cause my rhymes infest your mind, pull weaves and tweak brades highest in street grade, rhymes constructed and beats made ready to speak blades and throw razors that leave fades
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08-01-05, 05:01 AM | #13 | |||||||
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IP: 16E1 906B
thanks for the feedback grace....
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