ok hea it is, jus a quick throwdown..


Everyone who battles you returns ya ass to the sender
if we were on a game show you be my numba 1 contender
my rhymes are tite they leave u lyrically inclined
ya dun bro, the game left yo ass behind
i think its time for me to start real rhymin, no timing,
no criming, ya words-theas no subliming
keep tryin to reach my peak it aint gunna happen
chickens keep cluckin, flappas keep yappin
you's a wannabe like one of those american idol
cant rhyme, or sing cant believe you aint suicidal
now i know i aint the best, but im closest to pefection
the only thing close to me..is..oh wait...THAS MY REFLECTION!
ya washed up rhymer, along the shore wit those shells
sea water got to ya head, killed all ya brain cells
leave you swimmin wit the fishes throw ya hoes in the ditches
no room for snitches or those low-class bytches
onli publicity shots is ya mug shots
locked up for damagin ppl's ears a whole lot
i hit u in ya weak spot- more often then not
no doubt that i take it to the highest
anyone who listen to this yea they biased
cuz they favor me, 1000 to one
i murdered ya spit and me- i outdone
ya ass- cuz i jus murdered you wit this rhyme
im one wit words and you just anotha in line

any feedback would be nice...

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Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe

This was aight......I don't usually like self glorification drops but I tried lookin past that.....good job.....I can tell you have some skill......keep at it! Keep doin yo thing.....an hit me up sometime.....peace

Ok - I'd like to see you bring more similies and metaphors - you had a few. Lines like:
"you's a wannabe like one of those american idol
cant rhyme, or sing cant believe you aint suicidal"
hit harder than mere threat lines like:
"leave you swimmin wit the fishes throw ya hoes in the ditches
no room for snitches or those low-class bytches"
Flow was pretty good - I think it got better as you went along. Vocab could use some improvement in my opinion. You show potential though - ok piece. Hit something in my sig, preferably Broken Metamorphosis if you haven't yet.

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Personal Testament 3 (100 Bars)
Befuddlement
Broken Metamorphosis
Cud

Cool For A Chick...
Just Sounded Like Somethin Ive Heard Before

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Im tight with the steal dude, but you can look in my eyes and see for yourself I don't need one to kill you.