http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...60&page=1&pp=15

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sorry dude you just have yet to understand what punches are
dont take this the wrong way man...all of us at a point were like
that too...atleast you have good structure

dont explain your punches us readers should understand them
easily....


look for tokens thread he will gladly help you

weak attempt at what seems to be a struggle of wordplay

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^ lol.... you had some decent concepts like the McDonalds, and the first bar wasnt that bad... you just need harder hitting punches and personals that touch on more than what he simply said...

and dont explain all your barz... we aint stupid you know.

When I Called Him A Dog, His Old Name Was Oli Dogg.....I Didnt Explain It, ANd Nobody Knew ANd The First Line About Replayin My Words Is His Crews Motto

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even so...it's still not a decent punch...

i was just saying that you need not explain punches