ya bois growin im at the top of my roots, boi, throwin out alot of my fruit.. no ya boi totin gats that shoot out bullets the size of your boot// so try to attemp to go against homie that's you//
i am only 1 dude, but i got alot of options of torment to anybody tryna sheme of robbin my porshes// y wouldnt i my lambroghini doors lift// all my cars costed more than a grip//
try it, i promise to b out of my crib wit a pipe or.. sumthin like a knife.. al the way to a bomb bitch// how i b ridin, shit my fade low, blunt ablazed wit two bitches givin me fallatio//
dont trip cuzzin, just cuz yours isnt, givin out nothing but opinions// pimpin chicks i did it, i do it all the time// 42 keyz, a niqqa with i guess a bigger mind//
or a sicker ride, watever the reason, i get chedda// im in a MC dawg n u in a baretta// muthafucka im me, u just try ta b, n honestly// u r not as fly as me, that's why ya bitch's likin me//
sorry, but there's realy no need for an apology// ryte now im on the gas ridin, n she's on ridin me.. u should probably getchu sum pape// errrr n stop be-ing a fuckin haterrrrrr, yayerrrrr!!!.. lol


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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245051

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ona level dat was shit, dont stretch ur lines. didnt make sense sometimes but w/e

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i bring the arsenal like arsene wenger

This is not hate.

It was alright, lines are a little stretched and The best think you had was flow.
Really it's kind of basic. I mean the rhyme scheme was a little off, and the rhymes were all around one syllable even when you attempted multi's they didn't connect as well as they could have.

Also it was basic content, car/braggo ish. Nothing spectacular. It was alright, sounds more like an audio verse than anything.

Keep it up.

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iGhostwrite Mixtape DL

4/10....no hate just dont feel like u put effort in this at all......even for a quick keystyle it could of been done up alot better....its not smooth at all...seems like u just rushed the whole verse without caring about what u were putting down.....none of it made sense just scrambled thoughts typed out real quick on text.....but hey keep tryin to elevate....~1~

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B.E.S.T.....HAHA

erm dont use this as a verse.your lines were to long.alot of it was forced.take abit more time to put ur thoughts down and explain them better. keep trying,keep working