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Old 01-16-04, 01:12 AM   #1
Tyler Durden
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Intertwining wires herd through words and emerge right next to me
Moving westwardly in thirds.. rhyming inert verbs to surge in threes
Electricity sparks in high marks and goes down deeply like dive sharks
With steeply placed casings which feed off outlets or otherwise starve
Carving ingraved using tactics that cause an uprise like its hair static
Winding wisdom with wires into puzzles which creates lines enigmatic
Practice efficently when mind's right through chords connecting cables
While I discontinue burnt out bulbs that were nothing more than playable
Flowing currents stabling volts into time which haults into lightyear bolts
Speeding with tha torque of countless colts.. making this life image fold
Holding any charge at all.. with atoms clashing together then light spreads
But merely abandoned lines.. mostly fall after time.. killing any hopes dead
Seeing how things work under brought upon situations.. or even just tests
Seeping through crests.. drying flat.. but naturally seems all but pressed
Kanye west knows best.. but different kind of expression.. and impression
Different message.. tha rock fell and now he wears a chain of acceptance
Soon enough it clumps in mounds.. and chords circle around in clouds
From tha ground up.. holding any power extremely live yet in ways is aloud
Where tha modem is tha sire.. traveling through grooves or treaded tires
A virtual world.. building an empire.. connections made from internet wires

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Old 01-17-04, 02:51 AM   #2
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I liked It......lol
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Old 01-17-04, 07:19 AM   #3
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quite an original topic.... ya used some nice voacb and a good amount of syllables for a good flow, but in places it fell, and some of the rhyme transition could be smoother.... but some nice wordplay and worded well.......
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Old 01-17-04, 08:40 AM   #4
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yea...
you cant reallyy put it much better than how ^he^ said it...

nice key man...
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Old 01-18-04, 02:02 AM   #5
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Thanks everybody.... anymore feedback??
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Old 01-21-04, 06:17 PM   #6
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dude. ur long messages dont impress me .. but know what will. seeing u beat me because that will show that u dont type gibberish whenever u speak .. or suck dick ..
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Old 01-21-04, 07:07 PM   #7
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u AINT GOT NOTHIN ON ME man
if u think u do battle me
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