I think that is ridiculously pompus of you to say man. Can you specificaly
define poetry? What is good, what is bad. You shouldn't just acknowledge
the people who gave you props and discredit everyone who offers
criticism like they are the stupidest people in the world. I know
you are good and whatnot, but you can still get better. I mean
who really wants to read your poem if all you do is call them idiots for
not liking it. Even the dopest can still improve, you are no different man.
I thought the whole purpose of boards like this were to elevate your
writing not your ego.

this right here too is a bit inacurate. You can have emotion in text.
Do books not have emotion? I think a good writer can mostly definitely
display emotion through his/her words. While it may not be the same
type of emotion you get by way of your voice, tone, etc. it is emotion
none the less.
now as for your piece....
i thought it was decent, nothing spectacular, just decent. Now
dont take that the wrong way, but i can honestly say that i have seen
better from you. In my opinion, it seemed uninspired and a bit plain.
I would aslo have to agree with Bloomquist, that being there was no rhyme scheme you could have done so much more with it. It kind
of felt like you were just describing things, rather than truly painting
a picture. Work on showing rather than just telling. Anyone can
just say things but it takes a good writer to really give the reader
the feel of what you went through. I like the whole premise of it
though, it's good to see you get these types of hardships out in
a poem. Again though i'm sure there was much more emotion involved
that just didnt shine through the way you portrayed it. Just my opinion
though don't bite my head off or anything for stating it. Regardless
this was a good effort, but i'm positive you could have done better.
No offense. And in that quote you also said if people weren't poor
that they wouldnt understand, i think again that's entirely untrue.
It is the job of the writer to make them understand to feel like they
can relate. Im sure most who read "night" werent in a concentration
camp and people who read "native son" weren't slaves, but regardless
they still made you feel for the story and appreciate the pain and
tribulation the characters went through. You as a poet should
be able to do the same thing through your writing. Anyways
dont take any of this in a negative way, i'm just trying to provide
some actual criticism rather than just say this was dope or good read.
Keep writing man and stay grounded. Don't let success give you
the impression you aren't open to criticism.

-peace

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