This outkast shit has influenced-me-now
everyone crowd-around when i be layin-it-down
after my shows ya'll be hopin i'm stayin-in-town
with nothin but up-side-down-frowns when i turn-around
i see me starin back at me my reflection is eternal
verbal 'hi-tek' 'kweli talib' i'm jumpin every hurdle
i'm the freshest when i add-lib around joints i'm tight lipped
right from the muthafuckin womb i was blessed to back flip
your back i'll crack it in two pieces i smashed it
leave you more uncomfortable then summer parka jackets
my best race i may have already ran it but i keep running
face off with me for you very tragic i'm so fuckin stunning
i'm like that expensive diamond-cut oh-don't-touch
you'll get cut not just from the tip and i-won't-smudge
i leave fools debatin whether they need two or one crutch
or be leavin in a stretcher like limbaugh they'll be-in-a-rush
like your room mate smoked up all ya dope you're-in-a-fuss
who-can-ya-trust i'll leave ya more fucked up then the right white dust//

jus a keystyle, feedback welcome.

not bad...looks to me like just practice flowing, which is fine...some of ur rhymes don't really connect very well, but that will come with more practice...its good that u could stick to a topic, while u did this, for the most part...

keep truckin'
cheers

yeup just practice, i appreciate your reply.

yeah just practice and good luck in ya futue battles and keep droppin in here to get btter aight............

some of the lines didnt rhyme but its fine cuz next time ya drop will be a dime

see this rhymed and i was just talkin bout ya piece ya dropped....well keep a head up and keep droppin aight....