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Topic: You Are in Court Being trailed for Murder What Will You Say?

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Check Check Check Check

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Czeck out my melody/
Damn i battlin the great Cali/
Expect me to to give it my all/
Make sure to rise and not fall/

Lmao

lets make it a guld one

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^lol @ his check in you better not be in east new york ill have to come smack you for that wackness lmfao anyways....................


My tears fall like cascading waterfalls the light reflecting off the waters surface
The light washing accross the room in fountains of light like biblical worship
Yet my purpose wasnt righteous or divine in any shape or form
Cuz the flame that extended from my hand wasnt demon or devil born
I meant harm to maim kill and destroy to break down and shatter
So like a lost soul in darkness the light helps but does it really matter?
No regrets i soar free like the phenoixs wings accross the suns heated frame
I feel no shame for my actions what happened happend but im not to blame!!
Im from a enviroment where violence is a daily way of existence
And where you can die or live or kill and survive all combined in a singular instant
Where i live is a warzone but the troopers are civilians armed with the same weopons
But were raised to think we can escape its all a minor deception
So as i realized the lies and my world crumbled like old clay dropped to the pavement
And everything i held sacred was moved out of my reach from its placement
Diallo and those that followed was my worlds armagedeon while the other world survived
So I came to the conclusion to not fear a life sentence or a chair of election ive already died
So as i stand before you my back holding the weight of the struggle
I tell you i killed that cop as revenge............. for all my people he killed in the gutter

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The grim reapers feature seemed to be branded on my concious, placing me on my knees
I succumbed to the fear that engulfled my soul to beleive in an untimly destiny
His robes woven of those souls who were convicted to cold murder
Seemed to screaming in high pitched cadences that I's suffer
The hammer edict already seemed covered with the blood of my criminal minded brothers
I shuddered at the thought, but it was enought to dip my mentality in darkness
Slowly covering my eyes, until I saw a light, was my soul already departed
But then I felt the rusted chains cling my conciousness down to life, couldn't die with a lie
Then the truth made its self a blade, with honesty lacing it's side
Its glow contrasted the dirt and grime that collected in the essence of my mind
Fear dripping with my blood, encased the sword, burdened me again with my crime
I dragged my chains across the dirt ridden plains as my groans echoed through the cave
With my hope and trust I grabbed the sword, I was free, no more fear's slave
Once again I was back into clarity, again faced with reality, hanging from the thread of life
So with no remorse, I looked into death eyes and my souls cried "Why?"

Why did I commit such a sin where my God stated against its principles
But its hard to control yourself when devils become your souls principals
The streets were my playground but when I met them my childhood severed
Their clothes dripped of sins and thats when I was smothered in their errors
But my mind was naive, so I thought the consequence wouldnt adhive to me
But it was sill for me to believe in that manner, as the crimes severity increased
Soon I thought I was god, I could make rivers of blood run the streets
How many lives were eaten and spit back out from our mouths, left a foul order
Anything we touhed seemed to decay, turned sane minds on the path of disorder
I became a devil as well, with my sins dripping behind me, a trail of misery
It seemed as if my shadow was commiting crimes of greater severity
But in a blur of Red and white, soaked in defeat with the tinge of cold pavement
Now I stand here as a man and not Satan, with simple steel snakes making my enslavement

The chains were cut and fell and thundered through my mind and the courtroom
I placed the sword down and inched toward the lights beautiful bloom
Im freed from this slavery, now god Im ready for salvation from life
The hammer resounded a verdict, completed the circuit, covered my soul in light

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this was a tight battle... both of yall did well.. altho i do have to say they both kinda lacked on structure but poetry follows no rules so i wont complain

any way i feel cali showed more in the way of immagry and creativity of the topic.. it was a pretty good topic to right to.... no hate but cali got this one

VOTE- Cali

Cali
no hate or anything but you shouldnt not try for any battle but you did go good but ive seen alot better from you...your vocab wasnt really there for most of this
multis i didnt notice any really, the stucture lacked towards the bottom of the verse
flow was kinda weak..kinda streched lines liek the syllable count was off
but your verse wasnt all that bad you had good imagery and creativty thats good but the little things were bad for your verse...no hate or anything ight

D-ception
pretty good i should say the first verse was badly lacking stucture and flow but the 2nd part of it stood up for it with some very good vocab and creativty some pretty good god damn imagery and some great flow and the stucture was better in the 2nd verse as well, your a very skilled newbie you must be from a different site but anyway good verse from both of you im giving this to D-ception

VOTE: d-cËpt!0n


REALLY RIDICULES THIS VOTE IS FOOLISH AND DUMB AS FUCK I SHOULD DQ IT BUT IM GOING TO BED AND IM TOO TIRED TO CARE RIGHT NOW BUT THIS IS A GOOD EXAMPLE ON HOW NOT TO RATE A POETRY BATTLE FLOW STRUTURE <<NONO AND MY VOCAB WAS WAY BETTER THEN HIS ANYWAYS MAYBE ILL DQ THIS GAYNESS TOMMOROW TOO TIRED NOW ONE

yo i dnt know who 2 vote 4...both verses are dope as fuck and neither in my opinion is better than the other......

and C.A.L.I u cnt DQ parallels vote thats just out of order man........
LOL I WONT SHIT JUST PISSED ME OFF STUPID FUCK I KNOW HES A D.R AND HES A FUCKING HERB BUT HE DIDNT VOTE RIGHT AT ALL STRUTURE FLOW??!!IN A POEM WTF!THAT VOTE WAS JUST GAY AS SHIT WORD I JUST DONT FEEL LIKE DQING THAT GAYNESS NO MULTIS!!LINES ARE STRECHED?!WTF!!OMG I FEEL LIKE SMACKING THAT FUCKING KID HES BANNED FROM HERE NOW IM PMING STROBE GAY SHIT LIKE THAT MAKES ME MAD AS FUCK

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lmao @ parralel... voting for D-ception.. i mean yah dception came pretty good but cali had great imagery.. his emotion was on point... vocab was good the whole way thru.. i felt like i was in the scenario while reading it... this was a really interesting piece..

D-ception u came pretty well and for being up against cali u brought ur a-game.. but me being a decent poet myself(former poet of the month) i know hot to crit poetry.. and i can tell that ur pretty new to this.... u just dont have a good poetry feel when im reading ur shit..... dont get me wrong its good but cali just came a little harder.. keep it up tho..

V/Cali.. lmao parralel.. what a herb..

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