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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
11-24-03, 04:07 PM
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Keystyle
IP: F696 61D3
Ight Look
I just commited a crime and the gun you won't find// For blowing a hole in this ni99as head cus he didnt have an open mind// I started banging his girl with my stick like she was a hockey puck// Lyrically spitten like Im daffy duck// If ya feel threatened dont hesitate to get your crew// Cus I'll just shoot you and take your clothes like its HITMAN 2// Me and my crew aint fake we keep it hood// We stay takin' the LORD'S RING like im Elijah Wood// (Ight I was bored) |
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11-24-03, 07:11 PM
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IP: 340D 8B8F
you need to leave 3 names or 3 links to people you left feedback on or this will get deleted...
but this was ok....structure was ok need some work, try making your lines about the same length so it flows a bit better....flow was ok, add some multies and internals to it....vocab was ok, could be better...but for a keystyle this was alright i thought...overall it was alright...keep at it and keep dropping. |
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