i posted this up in open mic, and got some comments there, just ownderin what some of you tihnk can be done to help me out- (your insights are appreciated)

my words hardcore, even compared to war/
these lyrics leave you stunned when ya jaw hits the floor/
my skill is so dope you could wiegh it in grams/
I'm backwards, i shake ya face and brake ya hands/
don't give a damn if you's a woman or a man/
crush ya bones and stuff ya body in a can/
I'm high octain, hard to maintain/
you can't cage this rage or keep me off the stage/
so try to contain this shit I spit onto the page/
i ain't like u rappers cuz i'm only half-ya-age/
and when i dissin everybody it's gonna be an epidemic/
leave everyone of you bitches shakin like you epileptic/
so cover your ears, or you'll be sheddin ya tears/
cuz i buried ya game, you had your chance and lost it/
my game is cuastic, put ya vision on me and lock it, watch it/
as I take this line "nine" and cock it/
better hope yuor somewhere else when I pop it/.....bitch