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08-12-05, 09:25 PM | #1 | ||
GG Haterz
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Atticus:
I'm not a fan of suicide stories because they don't present a lot of creativity, but this was ok. Kind of a basic story, kid being teased and he thinks his only way out is suicide. I kinda like the approach you took on this topic, but it could have been a lot better. Vocab didn't really suit the person to me, but the story kept me reading. Not the best I've seen, but not bad. Could beat most people on this site. 7/10 FI: Yours was a tad more creative then Atticus', but not as detailed. Your story was kind of boring, not that much suspense to me, and emotion was average. This was an ok piece, but nothing amazing or special. 6/10 Closed Atticus is the winner due to a 1-0 vote.
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