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07-16-04, 03:25 AM | #16 | ||||||
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nice poem keep up the good job
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07-16-04, 04:10 AM | #17 | ||||||
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thx still uppin
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07-16-04, 04:33 AM | #18 | ||||||
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that's hot way to go
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07-16-04, 02:38 PM | #19 | ||||||
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thanx fa da feed...still uppin
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07-17-04, 03:57 AM | #20 | ||||||
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damn that's very good
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07-17-04, 03:59 AM | #21 | ||||||
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thanks fa da feed still uppin dis
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07-18-04, 01:30 AM | #22 | ||||||
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ay uppin dis leave a link and i'll get back at you
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07-18-04, 11:51 PM | #23 | ||||||
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uppin
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07-19-04, 08:07 AM | #24 | ||||
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Suggestion: Don't up so much, do what i do... Comment on other pieces you haven't commented on and drop a link... You're freeposting there buddy. Anyways.
I think this was just as good as the last one, and for the same reasons. The last 3-4 lines were the best of the poem. I would like to see more form you, but maybe something longer? 6/10 Return the Favor Stranger At the Gates
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07-19-04, 10:01 PM | #25 | ||||||
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ay...thx fa da suggestion liquor of tears...i'll do dat from here on and thanks fa the feedback...
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07-20-04, 12:34 AM | #26 | ||||||
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Yeah, I thought it was good. It was definitely an emotional peice. I think you really hit your heart on that one and let yourself open up, which is what poetry is all about. However, for me, sometimes it's hard to read a poem and actually give it any recognition and not get bored with it when you use abbreviations. I don't know if maybe that was just part of the artistic nature in which you wanted to display it, or maybe it's just out of habit. Either way, I didn't like that. However, on the total, I liked it. Good job.
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07-21-04, 12:45 AM | #27 | ||||||
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ay thanks for the feed...most definatley appreciate it...uppin
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07-25-04, 04:43 AM | #28 | ||||||
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leave a link i'll get back at ya...uppin dis
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07-25-04, 06:05 PM | #29 | |||||
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this is a great poem so keep it and also u made a good point in it too.
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07-29-04, 02:41 AM | #30 | ||||||
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thanks fa da feed...uppin
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