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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

10 lines check check

aight.....check, check.

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Can't Rock It With Vets, No Money, Just Pocket With Lent
See I Could Throw Rocks At My CPU And Not Be Rockin The Net

Life's A Story And It Seems Someone Just Ripped My Last Page
With No Skill......I Get Passed Around More Than Mics On A Stage!

Man, My Skillz Inferior, Nobody Even Knows What Is This....
I Could Throw My Spine In A Suit And Still Not Be Back In Business!

Drooling Is The Only Time I Keep Peeps Away With Spits
Cause Like I Said....If I'm Defined By Skill...The I Ain't Shit

Get My Skull Burned While Someone Shows Me, Silence Brings Death
It's Not That I'm Getting Pumped Up...
....I'm Just I'm So Nervous I'm Running Out Of Breath!

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That Faggot Narc-Uzi Be "Tossing More Salads" Than Veteran Chefs
Tell Girls to Take a Shit Then Wipe and Let Me Lick Whatever Is Left
Cant Get No Pussy So I "Masterbate" To Overweight Chicks On the Net
And Im Such A Pussy That My Little Sister Dont Even Gimme Respect
A Year ago I left A Record Company A Demo...Yeah Im Trying to Ball
They said They'll Hit Me Up If They Like It But I Never Got That Call
And I Was Jerking Off To Hardcore Midget Porn Same Time I Wrote This
I Would Smack Some Sense Into My Self But Then Again I aint Worth It
Now Im Pissed Cuz i just seen "R.T.L".......... Are Ya Trying To Play Me
I Joined Cuz I thought it was "T.R.L" I was Hoping to See Carson Daily

nice verse homie.......uppin for some votes.......

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LoL Yeah Man You Too Now Can we get some Votes

Lmao, this is the funniest thing I've read in a while.

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Can't Rock It With Vets, No Money, Just Pocket With Lent
See I Could Throw Rocks At My CPU And Not Be Rockin The Net
..lol. seen it before, but it was funny..
Life's A Story And It Seems Someone Just Ripped My Last Page
With No Skill......I Get Passed Around More Than Mics On A Stage!
..yea, play'd. but i i'ono. executed nice..
Man, My Skillz Inferior, Nobody Even Knows What Is This....
I Could Throw My Spine In A Suit And Still Not Be Back In Business!
..lol. that was good. keep shit like that up..
Drooling Is The Only Time I Keep Peeps Away With Spits
Cause Like I Said....If I'm Defined By Skill...The I Ain't Shit
..meh. this was weak. needed something more effective..
Get My Skull Burned While Someone Shows Me, Silence Brings Death
It's Not That I'm Getting Pumped Up...
....I'm Just I'm So Nervous I'm Running Out Of Breath!
..aiight. this was good, but could've used better wording..

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That Faggot Narc-Uzi Be "Tossing More Salads" Than Veteran Chefs
Tell Girls to Take a Shit Then Wipe and Let Me Lick Whatever Is Left
..eww. that was just gross..
Cant Get No Pussy So I "Masterbate" To Overweight Chicks On the Net
And Im Such A Pussy That My Little Sister Dont Even Gimme Respect
..naw. weak son..
A Year ago I left A Record Company A Demo...Yeah Im Trying to Ball
They said They'll Hit Me Up If They Like It But I Never Got That Call
..wow. weak again. work on witty concepts, definately..
And I Was Jerking Off To Hardcore Midget Porn Same Time I Wrote This
I Would Smack Some Sense Into My Self But Then Again I aint Worth It
..yea, this was also weak. didn't like..
Now Im Pissed Cuz i just seen "R.T.L".......... Are Ya Trying To Play Me
I Joined Cuz I thought it was "T.R.L" I was Hoping to See Carson Daily
..ok, this could've either been worded better, or was just too forced. not sure which, but was also weak..

Tech Skillz - aiight, your shit wasn't too bad. i liked some of the concepts and what not, but some of that wording was way badd. if you worked on wording shit better, like setting it up to where it works into the punch, that'd be dope. work on that and that structure was fuck'd, homie. stop with the gross spaces. looks real newb'ish.

Narc Uzi - your shit was mad weak. you'd think for someone dissing themself they could come up with better shit than that. i wasn't really feeling any of that shit. think of harder punches and wording and shit. decent structure. just keep elevating and you'll do good.

Vote/ Tech Skillz

yo, my opponent didn't show in my battle, but would appreciate some honest feed on my verse. get @ that ya'll. pz.

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thanks for the vote homie........uppin for more votes............

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LMAO, this battle is a dope idea....

Tech Skillz

Can't Rock It With Vets, No Money, Just Pocket With Lent
See I Could Throw Rocks At My CPU And Not Be Rockin The Net
- Not bad...decent opener

Life's A Story And It Seems Someone Just Ripped My Last Page
With No Skill......I Get Passed Around More Than Mics On A Stage!
- Played...

Man, My Skillz Inferior, Nobody Even Knows What Is This....
I Could Throw My Spine In A Suit And Still Not Be Back In Business!
- Not bad...

Drooling Is The Only Time I Keep Peeps Away With Spits
Cause Like I Said....If I'm Defined By Skill...The I Ain't Shit
- Not bad again

Get My Skull Burned While Someone Shows Me, Silence Brings Death
It's Not That I'm Getting Pumped Up...
....I'm Just I'm So Nervous I'm Running Out Of Breath!
- Ok finisher

You had some nice bars in there, others were either played or not good at all - Should have used more personals on yourself, but still not a bad diss on yourself considering its the first time youve done it...(I could be wrong tho).

NaRc-UzI

That Faggot Narc-Uzi Be "Tossing More Salads" Than Veteran Chefs
Tell Girls to Take a Shit Then Wipe and Let Me Lick Whatever Is Left
- Lmao...NO
Cant Get No Pussy So I "Masterbate" To Overweight Chicks On the Net
And Im Such A Pussy That My Little Sister Dont Even Gimme Respect
- Ok...
A Year ago I left A Record Company A Demo...Yeah Im Trying to Ball
They said They'll Hit Me Up If They Like It But I Never Got That Call
- No....
And I Was Jerking Off To Hardcore Midget Porn Same Time I Wrote This
I Would Smack Some Sense Into My Self But Then Again I aint Worth It
- Lol, pretty good
Now Im Pissed Cuz i just seen "R.T.L".......... Are Ya Trying To Play Me
I Joined Cuz I thought it was "T.R.L" I was Hoping to See Carson Daily
- Decent finisher

Some lines in your verse were worth the read, others were WTF...you have a witty style of battling and it worked a few times, but overall the verse was not that consistent...not bad though...

I thought Tech Skillz had the better verse in this battle marginally, both came better than ok but Tech had the upperhand as he was more consistent....Stay Up both

Vote - Tech Skillz

thanks for the votes.......upppin for more votes

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V/ Tech... he actually had punchline concepts. this battle was terrible.

Better than this battle.

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