listen

im frum chicago, where real niggas ride 4//
anything they love n put in work to see strive//
know that im no different, im serious n niggas livin lies joe//
4 real, still im ill, i am cane like lydo// yea
if, u ca make it rain, i can make an ocean//
bitches jock, n keyz'll getchu dropped if u like floatin//
then u sink, lyrically ya boy flame//
n i ca put u out, have u stomped into a nice portrait//
so gutta's the kid, so fuck wit it, if u wanna//
get the 9 burned at ya ribs//
u dont like macaroni, still shells u'll b holdin em in//
unless that R make em all go throo u like words that aint bein focused in//
im in a different class, im sick wit the pen//
i am all together ill, i depart him if he get//
out his body like his piss, cuz i dont take no shit man//
listen dawg, i ca get u popped like a dent man//
on a car, in it i am meen, no grin man//
n commin at me'll get u leened like kickstands//
on a bike, n ya bitch ride me, like one//
live n direkt Keyz commin from the site, 1//




2, i was checking the mic son//
never seen another emcee this hot in ya life youngin//
im, uppin ready ta hard broil these frawds like sumthin//
stuck in the oven on high, fuck it//
like wat it, is, i clap first, rap verse's maniac sick ill hersch spittin,
earthquake earth splittin//
lyricist, 42 keyz the dimented//
gutta child, n im fuckin wild wen i recite just listen//

lol, feed please!!!!


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245423
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245021

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what side of chicago u from

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ok piece, nothin special. but it atleast shows u have some talent somewhere, u just gotta focus ur words more and find somethin to actually rap about, this was very keystyle, try writting topics or shit like that, over-all not that bad and a decent read, also try rhyming better with better vocab and some inner multies.
keep droppin fam. uppin

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im so ill that cancer thinks im its father.

Yeah same as really, think scanz just about covered everything you need to add/improve on.


peace

southside fam

aye n yall big ups for the feed. this aint the last drop fasho
still workin sum strategies or sumthin out.. lol

but i think i had multi's everywhere in that.. lol, i just didnt put a line in between em like;

"then-u-sink, ly-rically ya boy flame//"

"so-gutta's-the-kid, so-fuck-wit-it, if u wanna//"

or shit like that.. iono, maybe i dont kno exactly what multi's are

aye n scanz i believe that topic shit. imma try dat out

more feed tho please yawl

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minus the multis and wordplay.....this piece still is a blahhh....it just didn't catch my interest....nothing special in it......try something new to write about....something thats more original....keep elevating.....~1~

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B.E.S.T.....HAHA

real feed man.. uppin for more

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aiyo wat k-m said shit was basic..i know its a keystyle and that tends to happen...but all its gonna take is sum harder hittin punches and some better structure along wit sum real emotion instead of the shoot'em up bang bang shit you got going and you'll be on your way to droppin hot shit....constant elevation is the key to success!!! 1
5/10 an thats pushin it..............

aye man thx.. imma drop in a couple dayz.. prolly tomorrow, iono.. holla

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k-m basiclly sum it up.....

noting stood out....

4/10

chea i got my nine and my dutches nigga u cant tuch us//
and we gettin that money nigga and itz a must bitch!//
i pull out dem tones thy start duckin//
we dont just hold dem gunz nigga we buss it//
keep 2 pumps to my side like cruches//
fuckin wit my team u ge smoked like dutchez//
if it aint about dat cash itz no subject//
my money like MC hammer u cant tuch it//
fuckin wit me you goin down da hailroad//
i leave these niggaz underground like the railroad//
im on top while yall niggaz bory me//
clap more 9s then forth grade autotoriums//

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